Childhood Memories

January 28, 2012
By myraahmad SILVER, Wah Cantt, Dist. Rawalpindi, Other
myraahmad SILVER, Wah Cantt, Dist. Rawalpindi, Other
5 articles 1 photo 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have a dream...


I vividly recall those days
When childhood ruled my world
Going over to friend’s houses
Climbing on trees; hidden in leaves
Sneaking ripe guavas in our pockets
And then running away; laughing
As the old man comes with a stick

I still smile at sweet remembrance
Of birthday parties and games
Throwing pieces of cakes at birthday child
Before being turned out by the angry mother

I remember the sleep-over nights
Bringing in teddies stealthily
And then calling home late at night
Asking for a forgotten toothbrush
When it was time for bed; and lights off
Each child quivered with fear
Feeling for each other hands

I love to sit back and remember the days
When running after mischievous doings
We used to wonder why grown-ups
Still think we are innocent



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Vvvvvv said...
on Feb. 5 2012 at 3:48 pm
I think that Vivacious is right and this piece is too broad and unrelatable. You should include specific and smaller details. Besides, dont you want ur audience to relate to ur pieces anyway??? yes!

on Feb. 3 2012 at 11:23 pm
myraahmad SILVER, Wah Cantt, Dist. Rawalpindi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I have a dream...

Thanks for your opinions. Personally, when I flash back, I would rather remember the memories that were more particular to me. As a kid, 8 or 9 years old, I never had an older sister to look up to, and most of my friends neither had one too, so we used to have this feeling of responsibility of being the big person, and it was a feeling we cherished. But at the same time, we shared our naughty moments too: cycling all day long, hanging upside down on the monkey bars, climbing trees, academic competition, soaking each other wet with a hosepipe (happened only once but my friends said it was the BEST thing ever). We were somewhat independent kids, who paved the path of childhood ourselves. So, my memories are something that are not foreign to me. They are something that I can tell my younger siblings, that "when I was your age, I did that! Can you believe it?" Luna557 is right. We write poems for ourselves. That's what this one is. This is the way how I express Myself.

Luna557 SILVER said...
on Feb. 3 2012 at 10:48 pm
Luna557 SILVER, Wheaton, Illinois
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
for springtime is lovetime and viva sweet love -e.e.cummings

I would respectfully disagree. I feel that adding to many details makes it a laundry list and takes away from the tone, which seems more reflective rather than overly cheery. Also, the point about making the reader flash back brought up an interesting point. Do we write poetry for the pleasure of other, or for the catharsis it brings us?

Rachielol said...
on Feb. 2 2012 at 8:10 pm
Rachielol, Bradenton, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
I dance like I live life, full out.

Dance like there's nobody watching,
Love like you'll never be hurt.
Sing like there's nobody listening,
And live like it's heaven on earth.

This is a very nice piece but I think you should include the smaller things about your childhood. I mean, old man with a stick? How do people relate to that? How about breaking crayons when your upset, falling asleep to a parents soothing voice, asking your older sister to paint your nails pink, wishing on stars, eating chocolate or learning to ride a bike with training wheels. You should think of the more miniscule moments that would really make the reader flash back and smile to themselves.

on Feb. 2 2012 at 8:14 am
myraahmad SILVER, Wah Cantt, Dist. Rawalpindi, Other
5 articles 1 photo 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have a dream...

Thanks for reading!

on Feb. 2 2012 at 8:13 am
myraahmad SILVER, Wah Cantt, Dist. Rawalpindi, Other
5 articles 1 photo 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have a dream...

I know. I miss those days too. Thanks for commenting!

on Feb. 2 2012 at 8:11 am
myraahmad SILVER, Wah Cantt, Dist. Rawalpindi, Other
5 articles 1 photo 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have a dream...

Thanks for reading. You are a pretty good writer yourself.

on Feb. 2 2012 at 8:07 am
myraahmad SILVER, Wah Cantt, Dist. Rawalpindi, Other
5 articles 1 photo 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have a dream...

Yeah, childhood was something that we'll always miss. But you know what, later on in life, we are going to miss the time we have now. So let's live this fully and find time for things that we love, right now. So later on, we won't regret it.

on Feb. 2 2012 at 8:02 am
AngelsKiss PLATINUM, Paris, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
You have the power to live another Childhood, so open up the door leaving back your doubts.

It reminds me very much of my childhood when things were so much simpler then the complicated life we all live now, 5/5 wonderful please read and comment on some of my poems:)

on Feb. 2 2012 at 7:18 am
myraahmad SILVER, Wah Cantt, Dist. Rawalpindi, Other
5 articles 1 photo 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have a dream...

Thanks for reading!

on Feb. 2 2012 at 6:51 am
winieandrea PLATINUM, Pekalongan, Other
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I really love this! It reminds me of my childhood too, nice imagery!

on Feb. 1 2012 at 9:40 pm
otherpoet SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
6 articles 9 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone." - Audrey Hepburn

You bring the feeling of happiness and innocence that childhood consists of. This is a great poem, i wish my writing turned out half as good!

Inksy SILVER said...
on Feb. 1 2012 at 1:21 am
Inksy SILVER, NSL, Utah
7 articles 0 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Three can keep a secret if two of them are dead"
~Benjamin Frankiln
"Love? Above all things I believe in love. Love is like oxygen. Love is a many splendored thing. Love lifts us up where we belong. All you need is love."
~Moulin Rouge

I can relate to this so well (: This is beautiful. It has a simple flow that ties that whole thing together in a really beautiful way (: Let's find a rewind button for life. Yes? Could you check out some of my work and rate/comment? I'd really appreciate it!

on Jan. 31 2012 at 5:39 pm
TheQueenOfLiberty PLATINUM, Mason City, Iowa
21 articles 1 photo 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't Hate The Person, But The Choices They Make,"













By: TheQueenOfLiberty

lol..i remember those days. almost makes me want to cry. how i wish i could go bac in time and just enjoy how happy i was


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