Broken Soul

January 20, 2012
By SilentlyRising GOLD, Decatur, Georgia
SilentlyRising GOLD, Decatur, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My pen is the barrel of the gun. Remind me which side you should be on."


I bare my soul to the world
And watch with downcast eyes
As they circle around it like sharks
As they study it with a critical eye.
They point out the flaws,
Overlook its shining qualities,
And pick it apart
Piece by piece
Until it is full of holes
And shines no more.

They leave me alone
With a broken soul.
Then you come along
And fill the gaps
With love,
Compassion,
Tenderness.
My heart soars
And I am whole again.


The author's comments:
I feel like this every time I read my poems aloud in class. Not that it happens, just that it might.

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on Jan. 7 2013 at 6:33 pm
In_Love_with_Writing GOLD, Easton, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things through Christ who strengthens me." Phillipians 4:13

You can look at anything that catches your interest or that you think you'll like best. Thanks! And wow! I didn't expect ANYONE to have the same pic as me. Wow, that was not expected . . .

on Jan. 7 2013 at 4:44 pm
SilentlyRising GOLD, Decatur, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My pen is the barrel of the gun. Remind me which side you should be on."

Thanks!  And I will definitely do that, if only for the reason that we have the same profile picture.  It really confused me at first.  I was like, "What?  I don't remember commenting on my own work..."  Thought I was going crazy for a second, but I will look at some of your stuff.  Anything in particular?

on Jan. 6 2013 at 9:22 pm
In_Love_with_Writing GOLD, Easton, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 389 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things through Christ who strengthens me." Phillipians 4:13

This is perfect! nice job! Can you comment and rate some of my work?

on Dec. 27 2012 at 9:44 am
GuardianoftheStars GOLD, Shongaloo, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Let's tell young people the best books are yet to be written; the best painting, the best government, the best of everything is yet to be done by them."
-John Erslcine

THis is so true!! You captured a writer/ artists fear and feelings on their work being critized. 5/5!


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