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Sitting in my wheelchair
My thin legs are strapped to poles
I’m stuck
Unmoving
I’m trapped deep in a hole

Each morning I awaken
From a wistful dream
Tears are streaming down my face
Dreaming of who I could be
I cannot move without someone pushing me along
Sitting in my wheelchair
To it I do belong

From the second I escaped
My mother’s womb,
The chord was wrapped around my neck
The smell of death enveloping
Like a silent tomb
The nurses and doctors running
In a hurried rush
My mother crying into her robe
My father saying
“Hush”
They did unwrap that dreaded chord
Just in time to keep me
But something was lost
Why do you care?
I don’t.
I’m still just being me

But actually the worst part
Is really not the chair
But all the lingering looks
And all the avoiding stares
Looking at the floor or wall
Pretending I’m not there

Sitting in my wheelchair,
Trying desperately to hide
My drooling mouth
And sagging eyes
Trying to make them see
The girl I am inside

Sitting in my wheelchair,
Dreaming of a better day
Where I will be on my own
Finding my own way
I shall prove to the world
That I can do it all
I can think
I can dream
I can shine
And I will take back something that is rightfully mine



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applesauceHater said...
Dec. 19, 2012 at 9:45 pm:
im sorry for the late reply:(but i dont think you even needed me to say that this poem is utterly amazing!!!!but im glad you asked for me to read it because its a brilliant piece that cannot go unread.
 
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Kiki_McGee said...
May 25, 2012 at 2:45 pm:
I absolutely love the subject you chose for this poem. Beautiful.
 
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sumer44This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 23, 2012 at 8:49 pm:
That was AMAZING!!!! I really liked it. And thanks for responding to my thread and poem.
 
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minty-fresh said...
May 13, 2012 at 8:13 pm:
This is SO good! I love the emotion in it.
 
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girly21This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 1, 2012 at 9:03 pm:
Such a strong and beautiful poem! I love it!
 
maizyiscrazy replied...
May 2, 2012 at 5:56 pm :
Thank you!
 
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torilutz8 said...
Apr. 30, 2012 at 8:25 pm:
Beautiful! Hauntingly powerful, I love it!!
 
maizyiscrazy replied...
May 1, 2012 at 5:39 pm :
Thanks so much!
 
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snowleopard100 said...
Apr. 30, 2012 at 7:42 pm:
This is such a strong and sad poem; in saying its sad, that's a testament to your talent that you can make a poem so emotional. Great job!!!!
 
maizyiscrazy replied...
May 1, 2012 at 5:39 pm :
Thank you so much for the feedback!
 
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StrangeJadeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 24, 2012 at 6:07 pm:

Bravo! :) My favorite stanza is by far the second, especially the phrase "When I first escaped my mother's womb." The way that even birth is tied to tension and false freedom sums up the atmosphere of this piece very well.

 

My only critique is that the rhyme seemed a little forced at times. If you find yourself reaching a point where you want so badly to use a line in a rhyming poem that you have to end up reordering the words, you should either consider making the poem fr... (more »)

 
maizyiscrazy replied...
Apr. 25, 2012 at 6:56 am :
Thank you so much, for you critique and praise. I do agree, that the rhyming is a little forced at times, so thank you for pointing that out.
 
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eternal_sunshine said...
Apr. 23, 2012 at 8:30 pm:
Wow! This was so powerful, you have such great insight! It is very hard to write through the eyes of someone so different than us, and I think you did that very well! Really great job
 
maizyiscrazy replied...
Apr. 24, 2012 at 5:37 pm :
Thanks for the feedback.
 
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dragonfly95 said...
Apr. 23, 2012 at 7:07 pm:
this is beautiful, just beautiful. it brings tears to my eyes. a truely emotion peice. excellent work!
 
maizyiscrazy replied...
Apr. 24, 2012 at 5:35 pm :
Thank you so much!
 
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Taconut7This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 20, 2012 at 3:28 pm:
Wow, I almost cried after reading this! There was so much emotion and it was very powerful!
 
maizyiscrazy replied...
Apr. 20, 2012 at 3:38 pm :
Awwww! Thank you so much!
 
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gb12197This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 15, 2012 at 1:54 pm:
this is a beautiful poem, it has so much emotion. i feel like even though it is so specific to what this girl went through, it is really about pain, and flaws that make society look at us different but we are our own regular people. it has such a strong message. i think it is absoloutley perfect, great job :)
 
maizyiscrazy replied...
Apr. 15, 2012 at 2:00 pm :
Thank you so much for the high praise! It means so much.
 
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