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Past Seduction

~Silence whispers,
A rushing, intimate gentle touch...
Bright eyes surrender,
Despite this persistent ache...
To give in,
Become what I don't know...
Just for your own satisfaction.~

~Playing with my mind,
Darkness intertwines with your words,
With your hands...
Making me love the feeling...
Wanting to hate the pleasure given...
But I can't resist.~

~Hunger in those eyes,
Lust slowly lingering,
Fading the tears...
Erasing the anxiety...
Who are you?
What have you made me?

~...Darling...
Will we ever know?~





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TheGirlWhoReachesForStars said...
Apr. 6, 2012 at 9:48 am
*sigh* oh wow, I can relate.... this is fantastic, and I love it, just like all your other work (: 
 
torilutz8 said...
Mar. 27, 2012 at 8:43 pm
Oye this beautiful... I'm gonna pretend for a second this was written for me so I can be happy xD
 
Jade B. said...
Mar. 10, 2012 at 12:22 pm
Once again beautiful, I could feel the longing eyes and almost taste the confusion and fear.
 
HiddenAngelInTheDark said...
Feb. 5, 2012 at 7:03 pm
Amazing work written :)
 
AllenStovall said...
Feb. 2, 2012 at 7:53 pm
pretty amazing ill try to comment on more of yours later
 
RayBaytheDinosaur said...
Feb. 2, 2012 at 11:09 am
Kinda reminds me of something I was going through a few months ago.. this is so beautifully written, you're sure to make it into the mag soon =)
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Feb. 2, 2012 at 6:22 pm
Thanks so much! I'd really love to be in it!(:
 
Wonderment said...
Feb. 1, 2012 at 8:52 pm
Wow. I like this as well. Its amazing, like it was a transformation you know. And the persond didnt know they were transformed Nice and once again 5 stars
 
Cut-out-ur-eyes said...
Jan. 31, 2012 at 4:50 pm
I love the last two lines in the 1st stanza. Its really good, reminds me of a thing I had with a guy
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Jan. 31, 2012 at 4:55 pm
Thanks so much!^^
 
JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 3:14 pm
I like the lines "To give in, / Become what I don't know... / Just for your satisfaction.~" nice =)
 
rachie-lou-who said...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 4:14 pm
It's very, original, however, most teens go off on the past love / broken heart things. To be honest, brutally honest at that, I didn't sense much of it being about a past love. Maybe I overlooked it, but it was nonetheless a wonderful piece. It flowed extremely well. (:
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 4:21 pm
Well some of it is and some of it isnt buy thanks(:
 
chloe_garrett said...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 1:17 pm
WOW! i love the placement and display of the feeling and passion throughout the poem. I just adore your work. You should get published! 5/5
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 1:23 pm
Thanks! And I want to be!(:
 
Ravenfall1020 said...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 6:36 pm
good job, well done, very interesting as well
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 6:39 pm
Hows it interesting?
 
recurring_resilience said...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 9:01 pm
Well written as always but there seemed to be a sinister feel to it, very subtle.. I'm not sure if that's what you were aiming for but it certainly disturbed me to a point. Good work. Though it makes me curious why you named it "Past Seduction"
 
-Jandee-Half-Psychotic- said...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 8:29 pm
I like the imagery and the feel of the poem. However, I'm not a big fan of the format of the poem. It feels a little... immature and amateur. I think this poem would be better in a different format.
 
WrittenEmotions replied...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 8:31 pm
Like what??? ?
 
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