.Lies.

By , yeux bien tres bien, United States
It happened
but never did
you knew
but never mentioned
the opposite
was but told
we thought
that everything
for possible
to be the truth
but the truth
is that you
Lied !





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OfMuchHappiness This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 12:53 pm
First, I like that it's short and gets the message to the reader without having to be all cliche and stuff. Second, I love how you put a degree of mystery in this piece, it's very interesting. Also, I like how vague it is so that anyone can relate. Good work!
 
shy2012 said...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 9:48 am
nice work :)
 
Acastillo said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 12:10 pm
Very nice! I liked that it was short, but it told a lot. Great job!
 
stanza1 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 8:31 am
haha this is pretty dope
 
josika said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 5:53 am
hey! this is very good and very relatable. keep it up!
 
Char1996 said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 1:08 am
Very good :)
 
lloveyouy said...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 11:16 am
Well said.. I really do get where your coming from :/
 
xJessex666 said...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 9:02 am
This poem is a bit simple You could've ended it better than Lies!
 
Silver2black replied...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 9:43 am
Yes, this is an very old poem, but thanks for the honest review !
 
Kimberlywrites said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 1:50 pm
It's a really unique poem. Very interesting way of describing a lie.
 
jasmin101 said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 9:13 am
too much feelings, i think they are a bit messy and not understood well in your mind. i like it , it seems honest
 
Tusillody said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 8:24 am
Seems like theres real emotion in it, I like it. I also like how short it is, and you still got the message across. :)
 
AutumnInside said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 7:14 am
I feel like this is really heart felt with a story behind it. It's very good. I like it's length.
 
recurring_resilience said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 7:13 am
Well spoke, but honestly not to be crass or anything is this about a physical thing that happened?
 
Silver2black replied...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 8:16 am
No, it's just anything i wrote down.
 
iamthebest said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 6:11 am
i think it's a nice short poem
 
cookiestar said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 5:18 am
This is a nice poem:). i like the message of the poem.
 
Illuminatus replied...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 8:08 am
it's quite nice ... reallly liked it .
 
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