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I will not wish upon a star
For when it fails its beauty falls
Nor would I want to look so far
When my pounding heart to me calls
Awakened from its lonely sleep
By the light in your splendid eyes
With which the heavens cannot keep
For they are brighter than the skies.

I shall not tap upon the wood,
Three times, or less, or even more
For this sound, I know, never could
Protect me from all things sore
As your sweet voice
For when I hear you speak
My troubles have no choice
But to be small and meek.

All my fingers I do uncross
With them I’d rather reach for you
Ill luck receives another loss
When with one glance, my dear, you slew
The bad that lives inside me
And in its place, you did leave
Shoots of love that you must see
A love story we must weave



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WrittenEmotions said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 5:43 pm
I've stumbled across this before, but didn't realize it until I read it again. Beautiful. You are WONDERFUL. Better than me(: 5/5
 
Bluewaterfall replied...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 6:35 pm
Thanks so much!! And no, I'm not better than you- our styles are just very different.
 
tealbird said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 11:32 am
This is great! Really good work!! Would you mind read/rate/commenting on my novel, Scarred? It's offline because it's being updated, but when it comes back on it would be much appreciated!!
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 7:04 pm
Thanks!!...and will do
 
Avram said...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 11:55 am
Pretty good poem, I enjoyed it immensely!
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 12:03 pm
Thank you!
 
Wonderment said...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 10:45 am
I love it. It's really good. And I typically don't like poetry that rhymes. Love it. Im giving you 5 stars
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 11:21 am
Thank you so much!!!!
 
Firetip This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 10:45 am
Flat. Out. Win. I love the superstition theme, it's great. ;) Keep it up!
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 11:19 am
Thank you!!!!!
 
Firetip This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 11:29 am
It's a crime not to rate this 5/5
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 7:09 pm
lol, thanks :D I'm really happy you think so!
 
youngwriter10 said...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 3:48 pm
Really really goooooooooooood!!!!!! :)
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Jan. 25, 2012 at 6:11 pm
Thanks !
 
Silver2blackThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 2:11 am
Wow, I really like this poem, kinda reminds me of 'Luck', But I felt your poems strong words, and completely enjoyed it !
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 7:40 am
Thank you very much!
 
jasmin101 said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 9:36 am
i like it a lot!!!! its smooth and interesting , thought the poem contains a lot of word and lines u make them seem like one, one thought .
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 10:09 am
Thank you :D
 
recurring_resilience said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 9:36 am
Probably one of your best I've seen! It was so.. so.. Professional! :D Nice work! I like your rhyming scheme it's one of my favorite types!
 
B. replied...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 9:56 am
Thanks so much!!!
 
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