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Mind Tricks

Life is a game
Girls are the same
That's why she screams
As I dissect her dreams

She calls me a knight
But I'm really a hunter
She's lost her sight
Truly asunder

Girl's feel too much
Yet I feel too little
Playing with hearts
Gosh they're so brittle

I want a strong girl
Who can see through the mist
I say you're beautiful
Resist!

See past my words
Just see the meaning
Tower of cards
Jesus, we're leaning

I see I've just lost you
But look it's okay
You'll see through my madness...

Someday.



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cookiestar said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 6:56 am:
This is a great poem, its well written:). good job!
 
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popo50 said...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 11:31 pm:
i love it sometimes thats how i feel
 
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poetidea_myworld_22 said...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 6:45 am:
this is wonderful!!
 
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Jadafunk said...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 6:07 am:
i really like this! Great Job!
 
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Silver2blackThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 5:39 am:
Nice poem, I think the word 'Resist' always make me like a poem !
 
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JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 6:08 pm:
Veryyy good! =) i like all the rhyming, and the poem is kind of haunting...i think it's about a relationship where the guy knows he's gonna hurt the girl, but she doesnt; she only sees the good in him, and all the kind words he says...that's why he tells her to "Resist!" idk if i'm right about that but, all and all, great poem! 5/5 =)
 
recurring_resilience replied...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 6:41 pm :
You pretty much nailed it right on the head! :) Way to go! And thanks!
 
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meanangel said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 2:51 pm:
Hey it is truly amazing. And asunder means apart, or split. do u mine me asking why you wrote it?
 
recurring_resilience replied...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 4:15 pm :
To be honest angel, the word just felt like it should be there. It seemed to flow for me. I'm not sure if it actually goes with the piece but if it doesn't it's funny how people miss it.
 
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vetenari said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 10:33 am:
Love the tone.... Keep writing!
 
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thefamoustapper said...
Jan. 15, 2012 at 6:04 pm:
luvluvluvluvluv it! awesome point of veiw
 
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KCayla said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 9:22 pm:
Nice, I like it :)
 
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biz1o1 said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 8:40 am:
This is reallly good... you should send in more pieces to different sites.
 
scenesoccerqueen replied...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 8:58 pm :
AWEOMSE! I hafta say recurring i think this is your best one!
 
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Abby96 said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 11:40 pm:
Well its not disgustingly romantic... i like it
 
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Snowi said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 10:09 pm:
Well, you have an amazing talent.
 
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Wonderment said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 9:25 pm:
I love it. It gives such a diffrent Point of virew thats normally not seen.
 
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HiddenAngelInTheDark said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 9:14 pm:
IT's awesome I love it man
 
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emilykl said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 8:08 pm:
wow thats really good!
 
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WrittenEmotions said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 7:30 pm:
Wow, this is great(: me and you have the same kind of personality
 
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