Mind Tricks

January 13, 2012
Life is a game
Girls are the same
That's why she screams
As I dissect her dreams

She calls me a knight
But I'm really a hunter
She's lost her sight
Truly asunder

Girl's feel too much
Yet I feel too little
Playing with hearts
Gosh they're so brittle

I want a strong girl
Who can see through the mist
I say you're beautiful

See past my words
Just see the meaning
Tower of cards
Jesus, we're leaning

I see I've just lost you
But look it's okay
You'll see through my madness...


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Emily_Greene said...
Oct. 4, 2012 at 9:49 pm
Nice flow and straight to the point. You can really hear the boredom and melancholy with women falling in love too easily. I like it very much. Add to favorites and 5/5 stars.   I hope you'll check out my work too.
ReadWriteBreathe said...
Feb. 12, 2012 at 3:35 pm
I love this. It's so true and I definitely can relate (even though I'm a lady xD)
Shmelmo said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 7:21 am
Nicely done. It is very well put together and I really like it. You have an amazing talent, never stop writing.
Skyeblu said...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 6:10 pm
Very original, I like how it flows together.
readaholic This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 7:14 am
Awesome! :)
alessa said...
Jan. 26, 2012 at 6:55 pm
Love it!!!!! :)
chloe_garrett said...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 6:10 pm
Recurring. I love this so much. I love the usage of the word asunder. also, i think this is my second or third comment on this... lol.
recurring_resilience replied...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 6:12 pm
lol it's your second! xD You didn't have to comment again if you'd already read it!
chloe_garrett replied...
Feb. 2, 2012 at 9:00 am
I know but lol i did anyways. haha. check out my poems and photos that just got accepted. I think you'll like them. :D
Sarakins said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 10:05 pm
Wow...This is awesome! :D
Acastillo said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 5:43 pm
This is such a great poem recurring! I love it
foreverred14 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 2:53 pm
Really nice recurring! I love your way of thinking!
Lashonti said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 1:54 pm
This is great. And I know what asunder means.! =P
TheWolfOfMay said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 11:34 am
Very nice, it speaks loudly to me.
Photographywonder said...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 10:35 pm
Wow :D this is amazing
should_icare said...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 6:55 pm
One Of My Favorites.!(: Keep Up The Good Work.! :)
Michaelseanchavez said...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 4:00 pm
This is a great poem and I think it is pretty interesting
Illuminatus said...
Jan. 20, 2012 at 6:18 am
It's really a great piece of poetry ! Don't get to see much stuff like these days !
chloe_garrett said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 8:40 am
oh recurring i love this. great job RR. I think its amazing. and yeah i know what asunder means. i have it in one of my peoms too. lol.
AutumnInside said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 7:11 am
You are a very talented writer. I hope it takes you places. This poem has become one of my favorites. Please keep writing. I look forward to reading more (:
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