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I don't know your name

don't know where are you from

you don't know I'm even there

but I'm always looking at you

i love the way you keep you hair

hidden beneath that scarf

my friends say the class is boring

but I'm just listening to you

when you ask those questions

your honey sweet voice is what

eradicates the boredom in my mind

then you talk with your friends

smile and giggle and laugh

i never used this word for any girl before

but i daresay you are cute

this is when you look at me

and catch me in my stare

i look back warily but i know

the damage has been done

all my spirit disappears

i glance away, embarrassed

you shrug and continue talking

to your friends apathetically

i can't describe the feeling

that I'm feeling right now

can't get the words... Can't write

this is when the bell rings

and you're gone!



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HarryJAMEs said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 10:08 am:
I love it! Is it real? I mean, is the girl really in your class? :p Outstanding though! Keep the good work up!
 
Ahmad-Mobeen replied...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 10:15 am :
Thanks Harry!
 
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hammad said...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 10:05 am:
It's brilliant! =) 9/10
 
Ahmad-Mobeen replied...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 10:15 am :
Thank you Hammad! =D
 
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Sophie Rose C. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 10:13 am:
I like the neat, crisp, compelling form, and mostly the words are beautiful. Maybe 'honey sweet voice" is a cleche' ?
 
Ahmad-Mobeen replied...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 11:19 am :
Yeah, it is a cliche... And thanks a lot for appreciating my work! =) It means a lot! (:
 
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sssmmm said...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 8:51 am:
Keep it up dude! You surely are talented! =)
 
Ahmad-Mobeen replied...
Jan. 19, 2012 at 10:14 am :
I will! =) Thanks a lot! =)
 
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Inksplotch said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 4:22 pm:
Aw, this is really cute (: I love it! Keep up the good work, you're really talented. Could you check out some of my work and rate/comment? I'd really appreciate it!
 
Ahmad-Mobeen replied...
Jan. 17, 2012 at 8:48 am :
Thanks! =) And yeah, I'll check your work asap! =D
 
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Ahmad-Mobeen said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 9:44 am:
sorry, the above comment was meant for you :p
 
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Ahmad-Mobeen said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 9:43 am:
Thanks! Nice screen name by the way :p
 
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sunshine destroyer said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 9:42 am:
5/5 =) Like Lacee said, I didn't want it to end! Awesome grip dude!
 
Ahmad-Mobeen replied...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 9:45 am :
arghhh! I posted it again as a new comment ! lol
 
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mike1234Harris542 said...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 9:39 am:
Awesome! I love it! Keep up the good work man! =)
 
Ahmad-Mobeen replied...
Jan. 16, 2012 at 9:45 am :
Thanks! =) And yes I will! =)
 
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LaceeJade This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 7:16 pm:
Ah, I didn't want it to end. I love this. Very good.
 
Ahmad-Mobeen replied...
Jan. 15, 2012 at 8:07 am :
Thanks! It means a lot! =)
 
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