Deep Love

January 11, 2012
By thatonelostguy BRONZE, Chanute, Kansas
thatonelostguy BRONZE, Chanute, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
Captain, I wish to report a mutiny. I can name fingers and point names.

Three little words was all it took to spark this eternal flame.
This passion brighter than the sun,
this eternal star burning for one,
that one being you, and only you.

This burning desire turns to lust.
This lust cools to a sweet passion.
This sweet passion transforms into a lasting love.
Ever burning brightly.

Eternally lasting,
never ceasing,
always going,
continuously flowing,
never slowing,
Forever calling,
yet never falling.

An explosion that is my heart always flocking,
continuously tick tocking for you.
Ready to to go off a moments notice,
a moments excitement is all this cold heart needs
for the warmth to return.
To keep it flowing.
To keep me going.

And just remember one thing girl,
I'd give you this heart of mine,
any day anyway.

Just follow me babe,
I'll take you,
elevate you,
escalate this love of ours.
I'll push it to new heights,
to a place untouched by others,

A little piece of heaven reserved for just the two of us.
To spend the days in each others presence.
A place I can just be enveloped in your beautiful aura,
your glow, your love.
You might call me blind,
or clueless.

But I can see through all of that
just to see what a lucky person I am
to be able to say your mine.
I love you girl.
And I pray you know it.

The author's comments:
Just spent a lot of time with my current girlfriend and that day was extremely special mainly cause she became comfortable to tell me she loved me back

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This article has 4 comments.

schristensen said...
on Jan. 17 2012 at 9:02 pm
schristensen, Coden, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
be you not your neighbor

im sorry i cant read it at the moment but wen my mind is striaght i will, i promise

on Jan. 17 2012 at 5:26 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot." -Eleanor Roosevelt

I'm a fan of repitition in poems, but for some reason I don't think your overuse of "eternally" worked in this case. Other than that, you did a great job with this! You should definitely show it to your girlfriend if you haven't already :)

on Jan. 17 2012 at 5:25 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

awww this is a really sweet poem! I love the stanza that starts with "Eternally lasting..."...great job, 5/5 =)

on Jan. 17 2012 at 5:24 pm
Evilgummysattack GOLD, Williamsburg, Michigan
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This was the single sweetest thing ever. I loved it, you have real talent and your girlfriend is a very lucky person to be with someone this deep.


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