Immortal Love

December 27, 2011
By HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
39 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
Theres so many that I can't pick sorry


I know we're young and only kids 
  
But I know that I care and love you deeply

I can't help but be so frighten from the thought of losing you

 Just the thought of you walking away from me makes my heart ache in roaring pain

Whenever I'm with you I can't help but feel so alive...safe...happy...

 Your touches are so welcoming and full of love and trust
Wither ten,hundred,thousand, or a million miles away I'll be there for you

 My heart cries out for your warm kiss and lingering hug

Our love is a unbreakable force that will live on for entirely

Our love is immortal so that it can never die...


The author's comments:
My feelings for the love of my life

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on Jan. 14 2012 at 11:38 am
HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
39 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
Theres so many that I can't pick sorry

Thanks Blue and I will

on Jan. 14 2012 at 11:37 am
HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
39 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
Theres so many that I can't pick sorry

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it

on Jan. 14 2012 at 11:32 am
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

This is a very sweet poem, a lot of the lines are just amazing! Like the last one, it was great. The only thing that I would change is the wordiness. I know that you want to get all your feelings across, but too many words kind of steal from the effect.

on Jan. 14 2012 at 11:32 am
NightGoddess17 PLATINUM, New City, New York
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simply beautiful! fantastic poem!!!

on Jan. 13 2012 at 9:13 pm
HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
39 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
Theres so many that I can't pick sorry

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

on Jan. 13 2012 at 9:12 pm
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"These are the times that try men's souls." - Thomas Paine.

"You don't understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could've been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am." - On the Water Front

"This is my place of failure."

Cute, Well expressed feelings. "Our love is a unbreakable force that will live on for eternity". I like how you word it as a fact and not a question.


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