Immortal Love

December 27, 2011
I know we're young and only kids 
  
But I know that I care and love you deeply

I can't help but be so frighten from the thought of losing you

 Just the thought of you walking away from me makes my heart ache in roaring pain

Whenever I'm with you I can't help but feel so alive...safe...happy...

 Your touches are so welcoming and full of love and trust
Wither ten,hundred,thousand, or a million miles away I'll be there for you

 My heart cries out for your warm kiss and lingering hug

Our love is a unbreakable force that will live on for entirely

Our love is immortal so that it can never die...





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Blue4indigo said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 11:32 am
This is a very sweet poem, a lot of the lines are just amazing! Like the last one, it was great. The only thing that I would change is the wordiness. I know that you want to get all your feelings across, but too many words kind of steal from the effect.
 
HiddenAngelInTheDark replied...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 11:38 am
Thanks Blue and I will
 
NightGoddess17 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 11:32 am
simply beautiful! fantastic poem!!!
 
HiddenAngelInTheDark replied...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 11:37 am
Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it
 
recurring_resilience said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 9:12 pm
Cute, Well expressed feelings. "Our love is a unbreakable force that will live on for eternity". I like how you word it as a fact and not a question.
 
HiddenAngelInTheDark replied...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 9:13 pm
Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
 
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