The land of the free

January 6, 2012
By Look_to_the_stars BRONZE, Kentwood, Michigan
Look_to_the_stars BRONZE, Kentwood, Michigan
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Wear the right clothes
Smile at the camera
Listen to the right music
Stand up straighter
Think in the right way
Listen to your elders
Don't look so depressed
Your free, don't you remeber



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AriShine GOLD said...
on Apr. 7 2013 at 11:10 am
AriShine GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"Whatever you are, be a good one." -Abraham Lincoln

It's a really old comment, and I don't know why I was being so confrontational :(

AriShine GOLD said...
on Apr. 6 2013 at 5:51 pm
AriShine GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"Whatever you are, be a good one." -Abraham Lincoln

I'm really sorry if I came off as rude; this is an old comment. I did not in anyway mean it in that manner, and no, I certainly do not judge you. I was just trying to point this out and give some constructive criticism. I realize that I could have phrased my comment differently, and I apologize for that. But just know that I was not meaning to be negative or rude.

on Apr. 3 2013 at 11:19 pm
Look_to_the_stars BRONZE, Kentwood, Michigan
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Okay well first of all, it's a poem it doesn't need grammer, nice try though. And second of all, it was wrong of me and I take full responsibility but another thing is that you come off very confrontational and you seek to throw something in my face, your intention is to make me angry and get in a fight and sorry but I don't work that way and neither should you. Another thing is that you just comitted the fundamental attribution error, judging me in an extremely negative way when you don't know anything about me, who I'm surrounded by, how old I am or what influences I recieve. The best way to handle this would have been to ask my politely instead of attempting to humiliate and critizice me, if you truley seek to change someone then the mature response is to act with compassion especially if it is a sight for teens, people who are largely influenced by those around them especially their parents. I might almost understand your argument if I was full grown and not so heavily controlled by my family but i'm still a child and still learning and trying to work things out for myself and your comment, honestly didn't help at all. You are not some internet vigilante and I would appreciate it if you would open your mind like you want me to do and stop your hypocrisy

AriShine GOLD said...
on Jul. 27 2012 at 1:51 pm
AriShine GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
13 articles 0 photos 131 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Whatever you are, be a good one." -Abraham Lincoln

Okay, I have a few things to say about this poem. To start out, there are a couple grammar errors, but that's not the key issue.

Here, you are expressing your frustration with conformity. That's great; it's a wonderful message. However, I looked at your poems because I saw your post on the article, "Learn Our Language". In your post, you said immigrants should CONFORM to our culture and learn English. Hypocritical, much?



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