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I love you, too.

At the edge of the hospital bed
I feel a thousand miles away.
Can he hear me?
I hope he can hear me.
My heart ushers his eyes to open
Only to find stillness in return.
I want to paint his face
Put the color back in his once rosy cheeks.
Just yesterday that smile lit up the room.
Now the beep of his heart rate reminds me
To breath
To touch
To feel
I want to break the monitor.
Put a miracle in the rhythm
Of a heart that fails to keep beating.
The wires all over are holding him here
Giving me one last chance
To say goodbye.
If he can even hear me.
I pray to God he can hear me.
I find his hand under the sheets
I hold onto it for dear life.
My heart aches to feel the warmth
To feel the life that loved to live
To hear his laughter once again
And put it in my dreams for safe keeping.
Daddies are supposed to laugh.
Why can't I hear him one more time?
The memories stay as his soul leaves
I say the last words I want him to hear
Can he hear me?
I pray to God he can hear me.
His voice echoes in my head
"I love you, too."



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holyblondecheerleaderbatman said...
Jan. 9, 2012 at 6:33 pm:
i thought it was beautiful and the way you wrote it .......... i love love poems and i think this is one of my favorites thanks for writing such an amazing poem
 
alligator6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 10:51 pm :
thanks :) i'm glad you like it
 
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InvisibleHeart said...
Jan. 9, 2012 at 6:24 pm:
Heart breaking. Very lovely and emotional poem!
 
alligator6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 10:43 pm :
thanks :) very much appreciated
 
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SoSammieWhatsUP said...
Jan. 9, 2012 at 4:44 pm:
my heart just broke your words areso powerfull through you writing oh gosh awesome job
 
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RMStultz said...
Jan. 9, 2012 at 4:40 pm:
Very Good! I Love it!
 
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Nathaniel said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 11:00 pm:
Striking piece. My most strongest feelings of empathy and sympathy are extended by it.
 
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Zinaidia said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 10:47 pm:
Loved it! It almost made me cry, and that is rare. You have a gift, bravo!
 
alligator6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 10:40 pm :
thank you! i appreciate it
 
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Fabala_G said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 10:35 pm:
That is very sad, but very touching. I like how you make the reader feel the emotion your character does.
 
alligator6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 10:39 pm :
thank you :)
 
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MateoMansilla This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 10:22 pm:
It is such a great poem!! :D You should definitely keep posting this kind of poems!!
 
alligator6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 10:39 pm :
thanks :) I will.
 
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SeizeTheDay said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 8:03 pm:
So beautiful! I'm tearing up right now. I know that nothing will be the same without your dad.. But I really hope that you can hope. And I love the fact that you found writing as a creative outlet - because you are an amazing writer. Keep up the AMAZING work!! (:
 
alligator6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 8:11 pm :
thank you SO much. i really appreciate it. :)
 
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NightGoddess17This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 7:42 pm:
this is soooo sweet! i love it!! at first i thought it was about a boyfriend... but thats cute that its about ur dad :)
 
alligator6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 10:39 pm :
thanks :) and thanks for replying.
 
ColeCope replied...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 6:02 pm :
Wow, very powerful! I can feel the emotion. I'm sorry that happend, just so you know, you are a beautiful writer! (:
 
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