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I love you, too.

At the edge of the hospital bed
I feel a thousand miles away.
Can he hear me?
I hope he can hear me.
My heart ushers his eyes to open
Only to find stillness in return.
I want to paint his face
Put the color back in his once rosy cheeks.
Just yesterday that smile lit up the room.
Now the beep of his heart rate reminds me
To breath
To touch
To feel
I want to break the monitor.
Put a miracle in the rhythm
Of a heart that fails to keep beating.
The wires all over are holding him here
Giving me one last chance
To say goodbye.
If he can even hear me.
I pray to God he can hear me.
I find his hand under the sheets
I hold onto it for dear life.
My heart aches to feel the warmth
To feel the life that loved to live
To hear his laughter once again
And put it in my dreams for safe keeping.
Daddies are supposed to laugh.
Why can't I hear him one more time?
The memories stay as his soul leaves
I say the last words I want him to hear
Can he hear me?
I pray to God he can hear me.
His voice echoes in my head
"I love you, too."



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pixxieloveThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 15, 2012 at 12:52 pm
it has a dark beauty about it
 
emmabergman said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 5:02 pm
This is very emotional and lovely. I rated it 5 stars ! :)
 
vetlover21 said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 4:06 pm
it's so beautiful and sad your a wonderful writer
 
biz1o1This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 2:12 pm
This is very beautiful. Not a flaw I spotted. it's perfect and wonderful just like you.
 
ExpressLife01 said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 11:42 am
What a lovely poem , it is really touching and you can see/feel what is going on there. 5/5
 
Muzee3 said...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 6:15 am
Really sorry about what happened! :( (sigh) We've only got to be strong enough to get over it! Beautiful lines! Btw, dont mind to check out my articles and one of them - CREEP THROUGH DARKNESS- hope that it will help u.
 
suicidexsilence said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 11:33 am
i like your poem :) its really good
 
thatonelostguy said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 12:16 am
it was beautiful and amazing, extremely moving, i felt your emotions through the page and cried a little bit
 
SoSammieWhatsUPThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 4:35 pm
I'm speechless. true beauty, and magic are found in your words
 
Frankietxter said...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 4:32 pm
Awww(: I really love this poem and it shows much emotion. its amazing
 
musiclover97 said...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 11:50 am
This is amazing
 
livelovesmile said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 9:56 pm
This is so touching and you can really feel the emotions thorugh your words. Great job, keep writing!
 
elanaxo678 said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 4:34 pm
this.is.amazing.
 
JaneCapelleThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 4:18 pm
This is touching and sad and amazing...i can totally see everything you described...i'm sure this poem will get in the magazine and i'm so sorry you had to go through what you described...5/5 without a doubt
 
Blue4indigo said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 3:43 pm
This is beautiful, and the you express the emotion here so wonderfully..... I got tears in my eyes by the time I finished. So, so sorry you had to go through this.
 
HiddenAngelInTheDark replied...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 3:47 pm
I agrees it's sooo beautiful and deep and meaningful but remember he's in a better place now watching over you
 
camcam2525 said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 1:03 am
this is seriously so sad, and the imagery in it is so beautiful. you are amazing at capturing the emotion that goes with this
 
always-sunshine said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 12:37 am
i really like this i felt the same way when my dad past four yrs ago
 
Wildflower30 said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 12:10 am
Beautiful. Readers can feel you. I would have been a spoiled sport and would not have talked about such a sensitive topic, that too, in poetry. Amazing job. I love it. Tagged as a favourite! :)
 
SecretFlame said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 11:16 pm
First of all the imagery is beautiful! It makes everything come alive, especially the painting his face part. This is one poem where I can truly feel the emotion. The aching heart, I felt it. I've read a lot of poems, and this is with the best of them! I loved it!
 
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