obivious...?

By , Vienna, VA
The girl in front of you is dying slowly
not physically,but emotionally
an unnatural death-
sadly he isn't noticing.

But, she has a feeling that one day he will notice
Juat feels it,
She wants him to notice
She wants him to see his secret tricks swen on her
She will continue until he stops and stares...
Because she knows he will,
one day.

Everything seems controlled to her lately;
Food,
Water,
Walking,
Sunlight,
What has he done?
Or is it herself?

His dirty secrets and nervousness
are all pouring down on her,
shattering her heart
in pieces.

Day by day
he is letting her die faster
only he hasn't
sensed that, yet.

But why her?
The girl who has sacrificed everything for him,
The girl who has blindly loved him,
Always forgiving and forgetting
all his mistakes.

Is this ever going to stop?
Is violence the only answer?
Is hurting someone a good feeling?
Is it just to have some relief for an amount of time?

She lies there, all by herself,
Wishing she could figure it out.
That night, he finds out about
what has happened to his loved one.

He wishes to start all over the next day,
To feel better,
To get help for
his acts.

Too bad, she is already dead.





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starzforever said...
May 29, 2012 at 8:25 pm
is is a great poem
 
missloveliee replied...
May 29, 2012 at 8:27 pm

Thank you!! :)

 

 

 
MiraStorm This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 2:23 pm
Though this is a sad poem the very last line made me laugh because of the irony. it was a good ending. some of the poem was cliqued though.
 
missloveliee replied...
Jan. 22, 2012 at 2:24 pm
Well...Thanks! :)
 
AlaskaGrown said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 6:51 pm
I... I... I'm speechless. Amazing. :)
 
missloveliee replied...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 6:54 pm
Thank You!
 
Shmelmo said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 6:51 pm
Really deep and Sad. I can tell there is a lot of meaning in this poem. Nice Job! Could you check out my poem, Once a Survivor Forever a Fighter? Thanks!
 
missloveliee replied...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 6:53 pm
Sure why not. Thanks!
 
DinoRaWr_RainBOW16 said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 5:43 pm
Good job. I love the poem, very deep and i just idk i have no words good job :) keep on writing
 
missloveliee replied...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 5:55 pm
Thanks! :)
 
recurring_resilience said...
Jan. 15, 2012 at 2:21 pm
So sad. Everyone gets hurt in an abusive relationship.
 
missloveliee replied...
Jan. 15, 2012 at 2:43 pm
well,life goes on.....
 
cookiestar said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 10:17 am
Wow, I love this. This is amazing. Beautifully written. Good job!
 
missloveliee replied...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 10:19 am
Thank you ! :)
 
scenesoccerqueen replied...
Jan. 15, 2012 at 2:17 pm
this is great...theres so many life stories like this...there is some typos but it great!!
 
missloveliee replied...
Jan. 15, 2012 at 2:20 pm
Yes. Ther's a typo in the first line...Anyways thank u :)
 
scenesoccerqueen replied...
Jan. 15, 2012 at 2:22 pm
no problem its a very good poem!
 
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