Broken Perfection

January 3, 2012
By LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥


Blonde hair and blue eyes,
She looks perfect on the outside.

No one knows how much she strives to be perfect through everyone’s eyes.

Everyone sees only what she wants them to see. It’s what she hides is what worries.

What they don’t know is how she came to be this broken bundle of perfection.
They don’t know how much willpower it took to look like this.

How much it took to starve just for looks.

She is the definition of broken perfection, because all she can see is her reflection.



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LaceeJade GOLD said...
on Apr. 26 2012 at 7:30 pm
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥

Yeah, I love to read other people's work!

on Apr. 19 2012 at 8:13 am
hippiechick99 GOLD, Mesquite, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 224 comments

Favorite Quote:
"... How dreary to be somebody-- How public like a frog;
To tell one's name; the livelong June-- To an admiring bog"
-Emily Dickinson

I know this is true. People used to think I was pretty perfect too, until I started being myself. I don't freak out if I only have 5 minutes to get ready or something anymore. I actually wrote a poem very much like this a couple days ago. I'll post if you want. :)

LaceeJade GOLD said...
on Feb. 13 2012 at 8:42 pm
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥

Thanks alot:)

on Feb. 11 2012 at 3:57 pm
milforce SILVER, Bloomington, Illinois
9 articles 0 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Those who have the ability to act, have the responsibility to act."

Very nice. Well written with a good meaning. I wish there were more things on here with those two qualities. I kind of laughed a little though because I have blonde hair and blue eyes :)

LaceeJade GOLD said...
on Jan. 15 2012 at 10:51 am
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥

Thanks alot for all of the good advice:)

on Jan. 14 2012 at 8:41 pm
lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
40 articles 5 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live Life Like A Party That Never Ends

This is very good! Personally, I would have broken down each line into stanzas, so the rhyming words are more definite. The one stanza I'm not crazy about is "What they don't know is how she came to be this broken bundle of perfection. They don't know how much willpower it took to look like this." Maybe instead write something along the lines of how she is a broken bundle of perfection because she made herself look this way because no one is born a barbie doll. All things considered, this is really good. I love your last line! Nice work :)

LaceeJade GOLD said...
on Jan. 5 2012 at 10:18 pm
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥

Thanks So Much.

on Jan. 5 2012 at 5:20 pm
Evilgummysattack GOLD, Williamsburg, Michigan
16 articles 0 photos 10 comments
Beautiful, that's all I can say. Delves deeper into the idea of perfection. I love it.


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