Holding On

January 2, 2012
By WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...


*Believe me one more time, see it inside these pleading eyes, I care...
Take my hand again, open your heart to me... Hear the words, remember everything... 
Don't abandon what could be... 
See yourself like I do...
And please, please...
Let us feel what is being numbed again...
Don't let what's been found become lost before we finally realize....
Just...please...please...
Whisper that your eyes shine with the same light, that you can't let me disappear...
~Hold me like before, as you keep me from fading...~*


The author's comments:
Basically just like Dreaming, but this is a plea of hope that something will change. I was inspired by just sitting and thinking about my life. Hope you like it and feel free to critisize, and tell me what you like about all my stuff. (:

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on Apr. 6 2012 at 11:21 am
_ella_herondale BRONZE, San Diego, California
4 articles 2 photos 224 comments

Favorite Quote:
"...If the Thames that ran beside them...recalled a night where the moon shone as brightly as a shilling on the same boy and girl... and thought to themselves, 'at last, the wheel comes full circle,' they kept their silence."

OK, this was awesome! I can't believe this is the first poem u ever put up here! Amazing, stunning, beautiful, all of the above!! LOVE THIS SOO MUCH!

on Apr. 6 2012 at 9:45 am
TheGirlWhoReachesForStars SILVER, Morrisville, North Carolina
6 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Imperfection is beauty; madness is genius.
and its better to be absolutely ridiculous
than absolutely boring.\"
-Marilyn Monroe

Just simply stunning, like all your other poems (: I need to get a certain boy on here and have him read this haha it's worded PERFECTLY. amazing job, once again.

on Mar. 12 2012 at 2:07 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thank you for your criticism! I appreciate that you love it and I will consider not putting so many of these ~ but honestly, the ellipsis are part of my voice in my poems, so...

on Mar. 10 2012 at 11:57 am
DifferentTeen PLATINUM, Seaford, Delaware
32 articles 2 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There’s no such thing as true love, just spurts of insanity—falling over and over again, thinking that won’t happen to me"

I did enjoy the conecpt, and I loved your wording. I think if you correctly formatted it, it'd be alittle easier to follow. Thats just my opinion. I think poems are wonderful because they can say so much in a little amount. The extra "..." and "~" s can be done without. It'd ook a little more professional. Otherwise, its a great poem. Its not something you can read through quickly and understand, which I think is what makes it realistic. Keep writing!

on Mar. 8 2012 at 2:34 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thank you, Chase :3

on Mar. 8 2012 at 2:33 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

THANK YOU!!!

on Feb. 4 2012 at 8:25 am
EthanCalhoun PLATINUM, Fairview, New Jersey
30 articles 0 photos 36 comments
5/5 like all the others, great writer

on Jan. 31 2012 at 8:34 pm
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
75 articles 0 photos 142 comments
This is nice. I like it very simplistic. 5/5

on Jan. 30 2012 at 3:12 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

Oh i love this one, i can relate to it, i love it...5/5

on Jan. 28 2012 at 1:11 pm
chloena_garrett GOLD, Colorado City, Texas
19 articles 13 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet.

Creativity is allowing yourself to make mistakes. Art is knowing which ones to keep.

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.

Art is the only way to run away without leaving home.

this is great I like the line that says "Don't let what's been found become lost before we finally realize.... Just...please...please... Whisper that your eyes shine with the same light, that you can't let me disappear..." You are brilliant. 5/5

on Jan. 19 2012 at 6:38 pm
Luna3952 SILVER, Lynchburg, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
All is fair in love and war.
Palsm 114
John 3:17

I like it!

on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:33 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thanks!(: I like it too(:

on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:18 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot." -Eleanor Roosevelt

Ooooooh I like it! Cool concept!

on Jan. 14 2012 at 3:52 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thanks!!!!(:

on Jan. 14 2012 at 3:07 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

This is great! the sentences and the way its worded really add to it!

on Jan. 13 2012 at 7:51 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thank you(: this is one of my more soft poems, not too emotional but still enough there to make you feel(:

on Jan. 13 2012 at 7:46 pm
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"These are the times that try men's souls." - Thomas Paine.

"You don't understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could've been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am." - On the Water Front

"This is my place of failure."

This was good. It brought back feelings I've long repressed, It hurts just to remember them. You know a poems good when you can relate to people on a personal level... Five stars. :)

cookiestar said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 5:31 am
This piece is amazing and beautiful, nice work :).

Fizza SILVER said...
on Jan. 10 2012 at 5:28 am
Fizza SILVER, Raipur, Other
8 articles 2 photos 177 comments
Nice poem. Good work. 4/5 stars. :)

on Jan. 10 2012 at 5:25 am
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Thanks so much!(:


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