On our Own

January 1, 2012
By Mimi15 PLATINUM, Belfast, Maine
Mimi15 PLATINUM, Belfast, Maine
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On our own, we can paint glittery words
Of imagination across the pure, blue sky.
We can sail forever in a balloon of hot air.
But, our love is rakishly jauntier than glitter.
Our passion is hotter than Alabama air.
Remember, form over function. Are we made to last?
Or simply melt away like the cream in my cocoa?
The needles in my feet guide me back to myself.
The bells on my wrist ensure I won’t lose myself.
But, there isn’t anywhere to go other than into your embrace.
That plays lullabies of young love to my willing eardrums.
Perhaps our wandering hearts will meet up.
It will take longer for you to know the feelings you own.
And it will take me time to convince you I own the same.
But as time remains, and you and I are here together.
Let us play within that giant box of glitter and fuss and sparkles.
You and I will make a foofaraw of what is not.
Like such is common place in all of those exotic lands.



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on Feb. 21 2012 at 4:38 pm
Whitterbug BRONZE, Rainier, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"A rose can't be a dandelion, and a dandelion can't be a rose" -Anonymous

You really incorporated different emotions and views into this poem! Amazing word choice as well!

on Jan. 30 2012 at 6:51 pm
laurensoccer SILVER, Palm Beach Gardens, Florida
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I love this poem. It is so whimsical!!!!!! Keep writing!!!!!

on Jan. 18 2012 at 7:14 pm
Mimi15 PLATINUM, Belfast, Maine
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Thanks! Will do :)

on Jan. 18 2012 at 9:39 am
AngelsKiss PLATINUM, Paris, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
You have the power to live another Childhood, so open up the door leaving back your doubts.

I agree with the earlier comment the word choice is quite splendid and impeccable please read some of my poems and comment your opinion

Ella1 GOLD said...
on Jan. 12 2012 at 8:11 pm
Ella1 GOLD,
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This is a great poem. You have a very good word choice! Would you mind reading my poem A Portal, Pink Watch, and Perpetual Sea and tell me what you think? Thank you!

on Jan. 8 2012 at 8:40 pm
hillary_ SILVER, Bolivar, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter dont' mind."-Dr. Seuss

I loved how it was serious but it also had "funny" woven into it. I love it.

on Jan. 8 2012 at 4:29 pm
writers_revenge BRONZE, Newport News, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
I think that I'm so psychotic and so mentally ill that if I could tap into that I could do something really interesting.
Megan Fox

oh ok. it sounds cool :)

vazenitran98 said...
on Jan. 8 2012 at 12:20 pm
vazenitran98, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I had the blues because I had no shoes until upon the street,I met a man who had no feet."

This gives such a beautiful meaning. Loved it *Rated 4* Thanks for your support on my work! xD

on Jan. 8 2012 at 10:37 am
Mimi15 PLATINUM, Belfast, Maine
49 articles 0 photos 74 comments
Oh. Thank you so much for taking the time to read it and give me sweet feedback and all :) A foofaraw is making a big fuss out of nothing at all.

on Jan. 8 2012 at 10:34 am
writers_revenge BRONZE, Newport News, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
I think that I'm so psychotic and so mentally ill that if I could tap into that I could do something really interesting.
Megan Fox

It's very pretty. I could see everything in my mind. but what is "foofaraw"?

on Jan. 8 2012 at 3:23 am
CoolBreeze PLATINUM, Winnemucca, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
The fear of death follows from the fear of life. A man who lives fully is prepared to die at any time. ~Mark Twain

Your very talented

on Jan. 7 2012 at 8:55 pm
Mimi15 PLATINUM, Belfast, Maine
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Haha. It is a pretty nifty word.

on Jan. 7 2012 at 8:48 pm
Zoe-22-Turner DIAMOND, Beverly, Massachusetts
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i like that word "foofaraw" its really cool and wierd sounding to pronounce haha

IzzyVT SILVER said...
on Jan. 3 2012 at 3:14 pm
IzzyVT SILVER, N. Ferrisburg, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
“If the person you are talking to doesn't appear to be listening, be patient. It may simply be that he has a small piece of fluff in his ear.”
― A.A. Milne, Winnie-the-Pooh

I love the metaphors you've used in this poem. Fantastic job.


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