the hated mirror girl.

December 30, 2011
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wake up, up, up.
feet touch ground.
upright now.
start walking towards door.

metal feels cold, cold, cold.
door knob turns.
door opens.
walk through door.

walk down the endless hallway, hallway, hallway.
feel for door.
open it.
walk in bathroom.

feet touch cold tiles, tiles, tiles.
clothes shed to the ground.
snake looses it's skin.
open the shower curtain.

shower head spurts cold water, water, water.
step in the freezing ice.
beginning to change to fire.
fire and ice: sizzle, crackle.

finally, waking up, up, up.
water coaxes me back to sleep.
with it's shhh.
water turns off.

towel swaddles my body, body, body.
time engulfs morning.
back in room.
barely awake.

look in the mirror, mirror, mirror.
girl staring back, hates me.
girl staring back, looks at her, with disgust.
I look at her with disgust.

the hated mirror girl, girl, girl.
only recently came by.
only visits in dark times.
why, then? why then?

sees herself in her mind, mind, mind.
looks at mirror.
sees compilations of people.
but not her.
no, not her.

where has she gone, gone, gone?
is she still in the shower, shower, shower?
is she still in her dreams, dreams, dreams?
is she lost forever, forever, forever?
trapped, trapped, trapped.
in forever, forever, forever.

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JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 6:04 pm
I can kind of relate to this. I like how you used the repetition, it gives it an eerie feeling...4/5 =) the idea is good too
billgamesh11 replied...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 4:20 pm
Yeah! It does! It's so original! Plus, I can totally relate to it! That's really important when you write, to write it so that the reader understands your writing enough to be able to connect to it. When they are connected, they are interested, as am I!!! Great Job and Keep Writing!!! :):):);)
WolfofDarkness said...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 4:10 pm
This is pretty cool. Very dark and depressing though it sounds like me sometimes. Keep up the good writing.
A.M.Blackwood said...
Jan. 1, 2012 at 3:32 pm
Very interesting ideas and intriguing format, but a bit blunt. My suggestion: think more symbolically and less literally.
IzzyVT said...
Jan. 1, 2012 at 12:41 pm
I love the repetition throughout the really adds to it.
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