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December 27, 2011
By Odile,OhOdile SILVER, Mumbai, Other
Odile,OhOdile SILVER, Mumbai, Other
7 articles 5 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
forgiveness is the scent the rose leaves on the heel that crushes it


As I sit here, against the wall,

I feel the cool stone on my back,

I feel your fingertips on my skin, again.

I close my eyes

The memory traces an outline in the sky

But do you remember?

Can you feel the wind blow through you?

Or the water glide across your body?

Your hand in mine, my head on your shoulder.

Me and you, just us two,

we were here.

Our place.

As the sun dims, I find myself writing this in silence

For now, its just a memory that lingers still.


The author's comments:
one day, i just went through my exes profile on facebook, and then i wrote this!

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on Mar. 1 2012 at 10:20 am
Odile,OhOdile SILVER, Mumbai, Other
7 articles 5 photos 28 comments

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forgiveness is the scent the rose leaves on the heel that crushes it

Thank you!!! :D

on Feb. 29 2012 at 10:41 pm
AngelsLullaby GOLD, Neverland, Idaho
12 articles 7 photos 95 comments

Favorite Quote:
Music is a higher revelation from wisdom and philosophy. ~Ludwig Von Beethoven

Drish you really have a wonderful talent. Please continue to write :) Very well done.

on Jan. 17 2012 at 9:29 pm
Odile,OhOdile SILVER, Mumbai, Other
7 articles 5 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
forgiveness is the scent the rose leaves on the heel that crushes it

aga!!! ily soooo much!!!! :D thanks :D

VAga:) said...
on Jan. 5 2012 at 8:32 am
It's a beauty

on Jan. 5 2012 at 4:45 am
Odile,OhOdile SILVER, Mumbai, Other
7 articles 5 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
forgiveness is the scent the rose leaves on the heel that crushes it

thanks!!! ily

Vrtkasn said...
on Jan. 5 2012 at 2:12 am
Great job drish! :D

on Jan. 3 2012 at 12:06 pm
Plain-Jane ELITE, Grandview, Missouri
108 articles 2 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And the Lamb at the center of the throne will be their Shepherd. He will guide them to springs of living water; and God will wipe away every tear from their eyes." Revelation 7:17

thats a sad poem. i can feel the emotion in it. good job!

butterfly123 said...
on Jan. 3 2012 at 9:09 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey ! beautiful piece! it is very good for the first poem. keep it up!

on Dec. 30 2011 at 11:11 pm
Odile,OhOdile SILVER, Mumbai, Other
7 articles 5 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
forgiveness is the scent the rose leaves on the heel that crushes it

thanks a ton!!! I'm writing more, and I've submitted quite a few articles, just hoping they'd get selected

on Dec. 30 2011 at 6:31 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

Dearie , you've got tons of potential in the art of poetry writing. I think there are some things you need to learn first , but this was a sweet and nostalgic poem that brings emotion to the reader. Good job. I look forward to more from you. *****

on Dec. 29 2011 at 1:31 am
Odile,OhOdile SILVER, Mumbai, Other
7 articles 5 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
forgiveness is the scent the rose leaves on the heel that crushes it

thank you so much guys!!! it's my first poem on TI, so this means a lot to me. hopefully, i'll post some more, and hope that you'll check that out too. :)

Fizza SILVER said...
on Dec. 29 2011 at 12:47 am
Fizza SILVER, Raipur, Other
8 articles 2 photos 177 comments
Nice work. Very beautifully written. I agree with Whitewings. Keep writing more. ;) Would u mind to check out some of my work??

on Dec. 28 2011 at 11:50 pm
WhiteWings GOLD, Houston, Texas
14 articles 0 photos 45 comments

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Nothing lasts forever on this Earth. Smile

I love it. You capture the past inside the present in a way that I myself can not. This is amazing and I wish to learn to do that.


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