Missing The Sun

December 26, 2011
Sunrise never came
To light up the day again
Has it forgotten us?
Oh! Where is my sunshine?
I need the light to bright up
My night again
Have we tooken you
For granted?
Used up your warmth
Or even your energy?
Oh! Tell me sun
Has Apollo refused
To bring you back
To us?
Oh! What can we
Do to bring you
Back home again?
To shine another day

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Ethereal This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 7:30 am
this is a pretty idea, but for example "tooken" should be "taken" the exclamation points after "oh" weren't really needed either
Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Dec. 30, 2011 at 6:41 pm
This poem IS an improvement from your other poem , Fish Pond. However , the poem seems awkward due to your overuse of exclamation points in the wrong places. The poem seems kind of silly to me. What you were trying to convey didn't come through as poetic as you would have liked. **
DarkenRose replied...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 12:30 pm
Thank you both and I'll fix this poem when I get the chance, thank you both again!:)
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