Missing The Sun

December 26, 2011
By SweetPolarBearHugs PLATINUM, New York, New York
SweetPolarBearHugs PLATINUM, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"All conflict in literature is, in its simplest form, a struggle between good and evil." - unknown author.
"All that we see or seem
Is but a dream within a dream." - Edgar Allan Poe


Sunrise never came
To light up the day again
Has it forgotten us?
Oh! Where is my sunshine?
I need the light to bright up
My night again
Have we tooken you
For granted?
Used up your warmth
Or even your energy?
Oh! Tell me sun
Has Apollo refused
To bring you back
To us?
Oh! What can we
Do to bring you
Back home again?
To shine another day



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on Dec. 31 2011 at 12:30 pm
SweetPolarBearHugs PLATINUM, New York, New York
27 articles 0 photos 75 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All conflict in literature is, in its simplest form, a struggle between good and evil." - unknown author.
"All that we see or seem
Is but a dream within a dream." - Edgar Allan Poe

Thank you both and I'll fix this poem when I get the chance, thank you both again!:)

on Dec. 31 2011 at 7:30 am
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

this is a pretty idea, but for example "tooken" should be "taken" the exclamation points after "oh" weren't really needed either

on Dec. 30 2011 at 6:41 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

This poem IS an improvement from your other poem , Fish Pond. However , the poem seems awkward due to your overuse of exclamation points in the wrong places. The poem seems kind of silly to me. What you were trying to convey didn't come through as poetic as you would have liked. **




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