truth never forgives the knife-stabbed heart

December 25, 2011
By caitiekate GOLD, Hopkinton, New Hampshire
caitiekate GOLD, Hopkinton, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want, not what you can." --Me


truth never forgives the knife-stabbed heart
for its lies bleed out onto drip drop crash explode
into my ears making my crazy-daring
confessions want to escape the gated bars of my teeth
--strive on with no holding back
chained dreams are true alive real reality
as i drift off i stay down on the ground
where shackles strain my now-trapped spirit

only love tries to free hated me
bees buzzing around the sweet flowercorpse
every stone is one more less breath
a witch pressed down by your foolishness
--strive on with no holding back
sweating fright turns to flight internally
in real reality i still stand there sitting

pure evil upturned in white clouds surrounding
rescue Angels not dare come
blinded by seeing through the light is darklessness
i wait for you to wait for me up
no matter moved on and out of our cloud 9
--strive on with no holding back
should i give up this fight of wits and strength?

common never is rare forever
not our love it is between hearts of gold
shining with the sun of morning rise nor set
love is the sky you love me in
--stuck in the middle powerless top, powerless bottom
birds chirp faint in my ear the blinding light black
no holding back i must strive on


The author's comments:
based off of "as freedom is a breakfastfood" by e. e. cummings

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on Jul. 25 2012 at 3:40 pm
caitiekate GOLD, Hopkinton, New Hampshire
16 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want, not what you can." --Me

thank you!! I'm glad you liked it..and i like that line as well....and yes I am aware of the punctuation mistakes (they were on purpose). i was trying out a famous poet's (e. e. cummings) style for this particular piece haha. he's phenomenal (: you should check him out! 

on Jul. 25 2012 at 3:37 pm
caitiekate GOLD, Hopkinton, New Hampshire
16 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want, not what you can." --Me

i didn't mean to put this as a separate comment....whoops!!

on Jul. 25 2012 at 3:36 pm
caitiekate GOLD, Hopkinton, New Hampshire
16 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want, not what you can." --Me

haha thanks!!! I am usually good with that...but in this poem I wanted to experiment with e. e. cummings' style..which is not caring about punctuation etc!! (:

DanielM SILVER said...
on Jul. 25 2012 at 10:40 am
DanielM SILVER, Kent, Washington
6 articles 1 photo 247 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I would rather hated million times for what i did then loved a million times for what i didn't do." - Daniel Moto
" I've sought out to be the best i could posibly be but when i hit a roadblock in life what did i do, i had two choices either stay at the roadblock or i take this roadblock and make of it and go around it and achieve my goal. So, what will it be?"- Daniel Mathia

"People take love like its a four letter word or just a phrase that you tell people or your friends all the time. But in reality love is much bigger than a merely phrase or 4 letter word. Instead love is a genuine promise or covenant to that special person."-Daniel Mathia

“Why change yourself when you were made perfect and wonderfully by the creator of everything?” – Daniel Mathia

“If live is not hurtin then were really not living in.” – B. Reith

I really liked this poem. My favorite part was when you said Common never is rare forever. Really good line. Suggestion: You didn't capitalize you're beginning words for your stanzas.

Rain. SILVER said...
on Jul. 25 2012 at 10:40 am
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.

Wonderful job and beautifully written, just watch out for run on sentences and captilizing words at the beginning of a stanza. 


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