Night

December 15, 2011
By ArtemisVale GOLD, Paris, Other
ArtemisVale GOLD, Paris, Other
11 articles 28 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth." - Oscar Wilde


Night comes to its end.
Eyelids flutter.
Someone in the darkness stirs.
A soft mutter.
Golden threads of dream hang from the sleeper's head.
Silky mists of nightmares swirl around their bed.
In people's minds a door is locked, the key hidden away.
The shadowy figures of sleep return to their lair and that is where they stay.
Until the black veil is pulled across the sky once more,
And the spirit is then free to soar.



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eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 23 2011 at 1:52 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments
I only saw 3 photos but I gave you feedback on each

on Dec. 23 2011 at 1:48 pm
ArtemisVale GOLD, Paris, Other
11 articles 28 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth." - Oscar Wilde

=) thank you!

eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 23 2011 at 1:40 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments
Okay I'll look at them...

on Dec. 23 2011 at 1:35 pm
ArtemisVale GOLD, Paris, Other
11 articles 28 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth." - Oscar Wilde

Thanks :) I hadn't even noticed until you pointed it out but definitely a good point to make. By the way, are you much of an artist? I need some input on my photos :p

eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 23 2011 at 12:19 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments
I like the imagery, but you keep switching subjects - "someone" and "the sleeper's," but then "their" and "people's," and then "the spirit." In addition, just a random "someone" or an ambiguous "everyone" lacks significance, so I think you need to rework it so that either it's a specific relatable person/group or there's significance to the lack of identity given to the subject.


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