No Particular Gloom

December 20, 2011
By camohunter19 GOLD, Sedro-Woolley, Washington
camohunter19 GOLD, Sedro-Woolley, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Girls are so queer you never know what they mean. They say No when they mean Yes, and drive a man out of his wits for the fun of it." "Violence is never the answer! It is a question, and the answer is yes."


A storm cluod shrouds the day
Its gloomy vail hanging over the city
The sun fights to get through
To bring hope
Bring it anew
Light’s sword pokes and prods
Finds a weak spot
And lo! it barges through
Now you see a shaft of light
And I see you


The author's comments:
I saw a photo on this website titled "light-pierced clouds" and inspriation struck me like a knife. Please comment!

P.S. Thankyou neverseeDeath!

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Brie555 said...
on Dec. 22 2011 at 2:34 pm
OH! Lol, well its really cool :D

on Dec. 22 2011 at 1:32 pm
camohunter19 GOLD, Sedro-Woolley, Washington
14 articles 13 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Girls are so queer you never know what they mean. They say No when they mean Yes, and drive a man out of his wits for the fun of it." "Violence is never the answer! It is a question, and the answer is yes."

The part where it says "lo! a" isn't a grammatical error or a typo, it is a full stop. It is a cool trick I learned

Brie555 said...
on Dec. 21 2011 at 9:23 pm

I totally love your poem! ;D I like how you got that frome a picture of a cloud ;D *hugs* Also I like the last two lines

  And lo! a light finds a weak spot through the clouds

Now you can see me and I can se you


leafy said...
on Dec. 21 2011 at 2:18 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Wow, nice poem! I loved the subject and personification, very creative :). However, I will put out there that the rhyme with through/anew and through/you does kinda bother me, but that may just be me...


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