Invisible

December 8, 2011
By Italy_Felixis GOLD, Walpole, New Hampshire
Italy_Felixis GOLD, Walpole, New Hampshire
15 articles 2 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For in dreams we enter a world that is entirely our own."


I am like a crow
On the wind,
With long dark feathers and wide black wings,
Sparkling eyes and a hungry beak,
Ever growing,
Always changing,
But perhaps I am different
Than what you see,
For if only you saw the inside of me!

I am ever growing,
Always changing,
A brain that takes time to bloom,
Inside my skull’s hard bone womb,
I have changed, my friend,
Changed I say,
For now I do things a different way.
My intelligence has blossomed,
I have taken on more responsibility,
Sometimes I think to fly farther from the nest,
And give my parents
A well earned rest

Soon my yearning for independence
Will overcome me,
And my past will be just that- a past:
The fire that burned a part of my home,
A death that changed my thoughts to come,
Grief that burned me to my soul,
All those things that took their toll.
So now I will let the wind take me where it likes,
Over children taking hikes and riding bikes,
To become much more than a black winged one, unaccounted for.

I am a crow,
With dark brown eyes and long claws,
Ready to bow when I receive my applause,
Prepared to make a bridge to life a new,
And find new things that seem fun to do.
Ever growing,
Always changing


The author's comments:
It is a biography of several changes in my life.

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on May. 16 2012 at 7:28 pm
Italy_Felixis GOLD, Walpole, New Hampshire
15 articles 2 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For in dreams we enter a world that is entirely our own."

Thanks, but I'm not sure any word to do with death is great to read to my class. I mean, I'm sure it would make it awesome and all...but my school, and my friends, aren't particularly prepared for that right now.

Lacer GOLD said...
on May. 15 2012 at 8:34 pm
Lacer GOLD, Highland Village, Texas
19 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
The thing about philosophy is that it often runs dry when thought of so shallowly.

I mean, take the metaphor further, apply WHY the crow feels ignored and invisible. A murder of crows is a group of crows, and playing with the word murder, I think that could really give an edge and strength to your poem, if you follow me

on May. 15 2012 at 8:27 pm
Italy_Felixis GOLD, Walpole, New Hampshire
15 articles 2 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For in dreams we enter a world that is entirely our own."

Thanks. I actually chose a crow because I felt like they blend in and are ignored. And what did you mean by peer pressure? 

DanielM SILVER said...
on May. 15 2012 at 8:21 pm
DanielM SILVER, Kent, Washington
6 articles 1 photo 247 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I would rather hated million times for what i did then loved a million times for what i didn't do." - Daniel Moto
" I've sought out to be the best i could posibly be but when i hit a roadblock in life what did i do, i had two choices either stay at the roadblock or i take this roadblock and make of it and go around it and achieve my goal. So, what will it be?"- Daniel Mathia

"People take love like its a four letter word or just a phrase that you tell people or your friends all the time. But in reality love is much bigger than a merely phrase or 4 letter word. Instead love is a genuine promise or covenant to that special person."-Daniel Mathia

“Why change yourself when you were made perfect and wonderfully by the creator of everything?” – Daniel Mathia

“If live is not hurtin then were really not living in.” – B. Reith

Wow...you rocked this poem big time. i liked your middile stanzas or paragraph any how that was really good.

Lacer GOLD said...
on May. 15 2012 at 8:20 pm
Lacer GOLD, Highland Village, Texas
19 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
The thing about philosophy is that it often runs dry when thought of so shallowly.

I love the idea of you being a crow. Crows are birds with an immediate personality disorder; being kleptomaniacs. But I wish you'd play with that, or chose a bird who fits your metaphor. I like how the bird wants to stand out, and the analogy of leaving the nest, but if you choose a bird, study up on it, and try to find a deeper metaphor, especially with a crow. A crow is easily one of the deepest birds you can base a poem on.

Food for thought; could your peer pressuring group be your "murder"?


on Mar. 22 2012 at 9:03 pm
Italy_Felixis GOLD, Walpole, New Hampshire
15 articles 2 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For in dreams we enter a world that is entirely our own."

Thanks! I just felt like they're something that's ignored by everyone. I've never heard anyone say 'wow, that crow's so cool' :)

Privyet BRONZE said...
on Mar. 22 2012 at 8:59 pm
Privyet BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
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lol i said it twice :P but specifically i like the part where it says being taken by the wind. I can totally relate to that

Privyet BRONZE said...
on Mar. 22 2012 at 8:58 pm
Privyet BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
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I'm really liking how you end up relating everything to the crow

Privyet BRONZE said...
on Mar. 22 2012 at 8:58 pm
Privyet BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
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I'm really liking how you end up relating everything to the crow


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