To a Heartbroken Soul

November 19, 2011
By lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Live Life Like A Party That Never Ends


Dragging myself into
the kitchen a post-it
stuck to the refrigerator

I’m leaving.
I’m leaving.
I’m leaving.

You can see it by
the way my eyes fill
with salty tears
clinging to my lashes

Faking
a hard expression
seeming to move on
I miss you already


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on Feb. 8 2012 at 1:12 pm
soulofdamnation BRONZE, Decatur, Illinois
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great poem good for memory

on Jan. 22 2012 at 2:55 pm
MollyDoubleU BRONZE, Minooka, Illinois
3 articles 5 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
"So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past." - The Great Gatsby

Everything you write is perfection. This poem was so simple, yet so powerful at the same time. I loved the repetition of, "I'm leaving." I also loved the very last line, "I miss you already." This poem was so heartfelt and wonderful. This is truly a work of art, amazing job.

on Jan. 11 2012 at 7:55 pm
AceOfAngels BRONZE, Milford, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
Truth is rarely pure and never simple~Oscar Wilde

I liked this poem a lot. It was simple, yet I really understood what you were trying to say. I liked when it repeats "I'm leaving." It was almost as if, it had to be repeated to let the message sink in. I can understand the feeling of having to put on a hard mask to stop everyone else from seeing how you are not okay. The description of the tears clinging to the lashes was great. I can really picture it. This was a great piece, please write more.

on Jan. 3 2012 at 7:16 pm
Likethesunrise BRONZE, Pinehurst, North Carolina
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This is beautiful, I love it. There is nothing too short about it. In my opinion shorter poems are more powerful, because they show emotion in less words. This is a great example of that. I can definately relate to this piece.

butterfly123 said...
on Jan. 3 2012 at 8:53 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey! i like the flow of the poem a lot. keep it up!

on Dec. 30 2011 at 3:54 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Vivid, once, twice, thrice again :) There is nothing too short about this, it does it's very own job well and then some.

on Dec. 30 2011 at 7:51 am
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

I'd have to say- I didn't really understand it- something about a post-it note that says' you're leaving? I don't know who's leaving, but it still conveys sadness, it should be a little longer I think, and it sort of left me confused

Bambi67 SILVER said...
on Dec. 30 2011 at 12:11 am
Bambi67 SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
9 articles 1 photo 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
remember that the future comes one day at a time.
Dean Acheson

i found it too short, but really good. the tittle grab me right away...

on Dec. 19 2011 at 3:09 pm
Jappyalldayeveryday, Detroit, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
They say that good things take time, but really great things happen in the blink of an eye

It's well written but didn't really grab me

on Dec. 19 2011 at 2:00 pm
ms.nerdalicious GOLD, Orlando, Florida
16 articles 1 photo 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A bird doesn't sing because it has an answer, it sings because it has a song."
— Maya Angelou

I liked it! Although I found it somewhat hard to understand what exactly was going on, but (if done right) that can be a good writing technique. but remember, don't overdo it! orelse, the reader will walk away completely confused. great job though! keep it up!


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