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In my heart there was a seed
The seed was dark and small
And from it sprouted a rose

The rose's petals were red as blood
The rose's leaves was greener then green
The rose's thorns were black as night

Inside my heart,
The rose flourished,
For you were my sun, my water.

Then one day a chill came across me
And burned the rose with it's cold
The petals browned and fell
The leaves withered and became black

So soon there was only a thorny stick

Fear me, my love
For it was you that made my heart cruel
Hate me, my sweet
For without a heart I am nothing

For I was wrong, darling
You are not the sun, nor are you water
You are an ice cold storm
Full of burning cold




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josika said...
Feb. 2, 2012 at 9:37 am:
i love the last two lines! great piece! 5/5 from me
 
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fryewriter said...
Jan. 5, 2012 at 1:19 pm:
Wow, I really love that last line. It finishes the poem perfectly, and has a great effect on the meaning!
 
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youngspeare said...
Jan. 3, 2012 at 7:55 am:
great poem! Keep posting :-) think you could check out my work? I'd really appreciate it.
 
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swifthearth said...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 10:46 am:
I love it. It is very well organized, very well written. The emotion was easily conveyed and your denotation was good. Critics: Although your denotation was good, it could have being better. try working on it and your poems will be very very successful.
 
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U2_FanaticThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 10:46 am:
This is beautiful! Best part: "For I was wrong, darling, You are not the sun, nor are you the water."
 
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TriumphantThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 10:42 am:
very descriptive keep up the good work(:
 
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Jappyalldayeveryday said...
Dec. 30, 2011 at 1:46 pm:
I absolutely love this, it's amazing.
 
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Muzee3 said...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 6:37 am:
WOw..... nice going with expression.. Keep it up!
 
SuNshiNe007This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 16, 2012 at 8:37 am :
Wow! I love this! Great Job! 5 Stars for you!:) Keep up the amazing work!
 
ToranThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 5:59 pm :
Fantastically Beautiful...or the other way around....:)
 
ToranThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 6:00 pm :
Fantastically Beautiful...or the other way around :)
 
ToranThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 6:00 pm :
Fantastically Beautiful...or the other way around :)
 
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