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What I Could Never Tell My Mother This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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What I could never tell my mother
Isn’t her fault; it’s mine
It’s things wrapped inside of me, coiled like wire with the filament exposed
She could accept them – those things – I’m sure
Maybe even love them the way she loves me; little puzzle pieces
That fell out of the box when we were putting it under the sofa
After we almost finished the puzzle together
But I hide them inside my deepest aorta
Keeping them safe because who wants to grab a still-beating heart?
It would kill me to take those secrets out
So my mother may know they exist
But she lets me keep them.
And maybe that’s the real secret, the one that
Shhhh
She doesn’t know –
It’s that I need some secrets of my own.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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wildflowergirl said...
Nov. 30, 2010 at 5:58 pm:
I LOVE this!! You have a great talent! Keep writing!
 
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kayden said...
Nov. 30, 2010 at 5:06 pm:
i really enjoyed this(:
 
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KiraBira11 said...
Nov. 30, 2010 at 1:26 pm:
I feel the same way about having a relationship with my mother;really wish i could.
 
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KiraBira11 said...
Nov. 30, 2010 at 1:24 pm:
I enjoyed reading this.
 
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massiekur said...
Nov. 30, 2010 at 1:11 pm:
i really, really liked this. i'm not exactly sure why, but i really did. good job (:
 
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cezzcez3 said...
Nov. 30, 2010 at 10:39 am:
aww this is really good. i love that we can keep secrets fom people buut some how people find out :(
 
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RedpillBluepill said...
Nov. 29, 2010 at 1:16 am:
the "aorta" really ruined this for me. It's such a clunky word, and it's not even used right in this write. Also, the semicolon should be a regular colon. But other than that, this poem's really good.
 
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KrystalT said...
Nov. 21, 2010 at 2:13 pm:
I wish I had a relationship like that with my mom. Or any at all really. (I haven't seen her in over a year) Keep writing.
 
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WritingJulia This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 6:56 pm:
This is great!
 
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Ducttape.holds.my.heart.toghter said...
Oct. 22, 2010 at 6:30 pm:
This is so good I love it.....your way way better then you you dont need help!
 
CherokeeDoggette replied...
Nov. 5, 2010 at 1:30 pm :

i love this poem and i can really relate because i have secrets of my own that i could never reveal to my mother

 

 
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CammyLashay said...
Oct. 17, 2010 at 3:20 pm:
i enjoyed this poem couldnt understand where it was leading but i caught on
 
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Dessometrics said...
Oct. 17, 2010 at 1:52 pm:
i love this its abosolutely amazing and really paints a picture of the relationship
 
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SaMiLoVe97 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 24, 2010 at 9:33 am:

Beautiful work. Keep writing:)

                                            <3 Sami

 
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Cupcakealia said...
Sept. 8, 2010 at 9:46 am:

this is such a lovely piece!!!

 

 
summer rose123 replied...
Oct. 14, 2010 at 9:48 pm :
its really pretty and graceful
 
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Phantom_Girl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 3, 2010 at 10:49 am:
Incredibly well written with a beautiful, relatable theme. The ending was perfect, it kind of left you wondering, but not too much. You are a great writer.
 
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xXDeadxSoulXx said...
Aug. 25, 2010 at 11:28 am:

This is REALLY good and I love it....I can totally relate to this in some ways and kinda cant in others......So yea uhm great job haha......

 

(P.S. Check out some of my poems if you have the time...Thankies :]] )

 
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Ramonda S said...
Aug. 14, 2010 at 5:01 pm:
I really enjoyed reading this! I love this
 
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Lizz17 said...
Aug. 12, 2010 at 8:29 pm:
I have to say that this is amazing but, what's it about? at first i thought it was about a pregnant teenager but then i looked up the word aorta and it was part of the heart. is it about drugs or something? Either way, it's still good.
 
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