What I Could Never Tell My Mother This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

February 1, 2008
What I could never tell my mother
Isn’t her fault; it’s mine
It’s things wrapped inside of me, coiled like wire with the filament exposed
She could accept them – those things – I’m sure
Maybe even love them the way she loves me; little puzzle pieces
That fell out of the box when we were putting it under the sofa
After we almost finished the puzzle together
But I hide them inside my deepest aorta
Keeping them safe because who wants to grab a still-beating heart?
It would kill me to take those secrets out
So my mother may know they exist
But she lets me keep them.
And maybe that’s the real secret, the one that
She doesn’t know –
It’s that I need some secrets of my own.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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forever.dancing said...
Jun. 2, 2011 at 11:52 am
excellent! it's funny becuz i am feeling the exact same way right now. its as if u took my feelings n changed them into words :) keep up the good work
the.world.in.my.eyes said...
May 25, 2011 at 6:56 pm
this is a great poem :) good job!
artlover101 said...
May 24, 2011 at 6:16 pm
I really like the ending :)
featherssss said...
May 13, 2011 at 3:14 pm
this is written very well. i can relate to this poem, there are a lot of things i cannot tell my mother and i enjoyed reading this poem, good job(:
Jariel V. said...
May 5, 2011 at 5:23 pm
good work i like that
wasauskyx said...
May 5, 2011 at 3:42 pm
haha i agree with this :) nice work
taraburns said...
Apr. 29, 2011 at 10:41 am
i love thiss! your a good poet:)
Rachet said...
Apr. 28, 2011 at 12:19 pm
This was Beautiful, Thank you for sharing.
Helene said...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 6:40 pm
i love your words they make since to me
livelaughlovepraise said...
Apr. 12, 2011 at 1:48 pm
I love this so much! Keep growing your writing!
RideTheWave said...
Apr. 11, 2011 at 3:39 pm
This was really good!!!!
Laurennnn said...
Apr. 9, 2011 at 1:15 am

This is really good, and I can relate, but I think it could be better if you did a little revising and condenced it a little.

"Say the most you can in the fewest words possible." -Robert Frost.

"Remove the unnessisary so the nessisary can speak." -Mrs. Hambrick (My 7th and 8th grade English teacher; she'd bloody brillant.)

DearAlyssa said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 5:59 pm
I understand how you feel... There are just thing's I could never tell my mom.
-Selenecullen- said...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 1:54 am
very beautifully written , kepp up the good work
secrets said...
Mar. 26, 2011 at 10:04 pm
I have lots of secerts from my mother so i understand where u come from. ur words put it in a view for me tht no one else has. great writin
desmiree said...
Mar. 18, 2011 at 11:55 am
That was really good the only time I can write poetry is when I'm upset or sad.
C8Star77 said...
Mar. 13, 2011 at 1:57 pm
Wow. Your talent is amazing, and you definitely have strong emotion behind it. Keep up the great work!
Griffiths1998 said...
Mar. 8, 2011 at 5:41 pm
i think we all need some secrets of our own. Good Job
Nooneimportant2u said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 10:14 am
So deep and profound , very nice, i admire its uniqueness
PerfectMGymnast This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 4, 2011 at 10:04 pm
i love this especially the last line!! :)
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