What I Could Never Tell My Mother This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

February 1, 2008
What I could never tell my mother
Isn’t her fault; it’s mine
It’s things wrapped inside of me, coiled like wire with the filament exposed
She could accept them – those things – I’m sure
Maybe even love them the way she loves me; little puzzle pieces
That fell out of the box when we were putting it under the sofa
After we almost finished the puzzle together
But I hide them inside my deepest aorta
Keeping them safe because who wants to grab a still-beating heart?
It would kill me to take those secrets out
So my mother may know they exist
But she lets me keep them.
And maybe that’s the real secret, the one that
She doesn’t know –
It’s that I need some secrets of my own.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Miyavi27 said...
Mar. 30, 2009 at 6:36 pm
Good, but lacking some more support...IDK..xD the imagery is spot on and the tone is present but not overpowering...Beaute'
Scornedtruth said...
Mar. 27, 2009 at 12:35 am
Wow it's wow
Spiffykid2oxo This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 26, 2009 at 8:17 pm
Wow. Eye opening.
Zori Bettar said...
Mar. 26, 2009 at 7:32 pm
Very good, and pieced together nicely. I'm almost drawn to it. I had to read it twice =)
Renaissance said...
Mar. 24, 2009 at 4:27 am
Very sophisticated and well written.
ziziluver91 said...
Mar. 24, 2009 at 12:42 am
This poem is so true and good! i can totally relate to it completely..sometimes they are better off not knowing..
project827 said...
Mar. 17, 2009 at 10:54 pm
very good, very good.
neenee111 said...
Mar. 17, 2009 at 8:31 pm
I like how you worded the poem. It was great and I can relate.
KittKat1119 said...
Mar. 17, 2009 at 12:39 pm
I can totally understand the poem itz amazing and i feel what ur saying
jessigene915 said...
Mar. 14, 2009 at 11:36 pm
I really enjoyed reading this poem because your point is very clear and I can relate to what you are saying.
mandygale77 said...
Mar. 14, 2009 at 4:41 pm
Wow, that was really good! Deep, great language usage, the works. I'm not quite sure I agree with your point, as I'm actually pretty close to my mother (not my dad, though, ugh) but I understand it, at least. There's some things people just can't know.
Tavy M. said...
Mar. 14, 2009 at 3:46 pm
I totally see where you're coming from. My mother and I are very close and she says I can tell her everything, but there's always going to be something that she's better off not knowing. I don't keep these things secrets because I don't love her, it's just a necessary precaution. The comparison of secrets to puzzle pieces is very true. Once you obtain enough secrets they all start to put themselves together in a way that makes sense. Keep on writing, you're inspirational! :]
Amari S. said...
Mar. 14, 2009 at 4:16 am
wow thats true..what they dont know cant hurt them...i like you poem

fallingintothedark said...
Mar. 13, 2009 at 11:40 pm
it was very powerful and mind blowing
you should continue writing excellent word choice tho it was a lil out there which made it realy good
Mckenzi M. said...
Mar. 13, 2009 at 5:55 pm
I liked this poem a lot. Because i can relate to this. Good job. :)
Steph247 said...
Mar. 13, 2009 at 5:11 pm
wow this really inpired me!! this poem has biven me such a great ideas for other peoms! kudos
Ariana H. said...
Mar. 5, 2009 at 12:20 am
I loved the style that you used in your writing!
melissa H. said...
Mar. 4, 2009 at 10:39 pm
i really liked it.
it shows deep emotions.
it was great!
WHOiNEED2B said...
Mar. 4, 2009 at 9:06 pm
I like the way it seemed to show the emotion. Of that you keep a secret and she knowing still let's you keep it. It shows, and i feel an understanding towards it.
K.K said...
Mar. 3, 2009 at 10:41 pm
hey your poem was very unique and pretty it flowed nicely and it made perfect since your an amazing writer born with true talent congrats for getting it published.
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