What I Could Never Tell My Mother MAG

February 1, 2008
By Margaret Westenhoff, Reston, VA

What I could never tell my mother
Isn’t her fault; it’s mine
It’s things wrapped inside of me, coiled like wire with the filament exposed
She could accept them – those things – I’m sure
Maybe even love them the way she loves me; little puzzle pieces
That fell out of the box when we were putting it under the sofa
After we almost finished the puzzle together
But I hide them inside my deepest aorta
Keeping them safe because who wants to grab a still-beating heart?
It would kill me to take those secrets out
So my mother may know they exist
But she lets me keep them.
And maybe that’s the real secret, the one that
Shhhh
She doesn’t know –
It’s that I need some secrets of my own.



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on Mar. 31 2009 at 1:54 am
annkaykay2011 DIAMOND, Lansing, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"I am who I am, sorry, no changes."

Deep. It has a nice sharp point of view and formatted very well. :)

Miyavi27 said...
on Mar. 30 2009 at 6:36 pm
Good, but lacking some more support...IDK..xD the imagery is spot on and the tone is present but not overpowering...Beaute'

on Mar. 27 2009 at 12:35 am
Scornedtruth BRONZE, PITTSBURGH, Pennsylvania
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Wow it's wow

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on Mar. 26 2009 at 8:17 pm
Erin_A SILVER, Coral Springs, Florida
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Wow. Eye opening.

Zori Bettar said...
on Mar. 26 2009 at 7:32 pm
Very good, and pieced together nicely. I'm almost drawn to it. I had to read it twice =)

on Mar. 24 2009 at 4:27 am
Renaissance SILVER, Milpitas, California
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Favorite Quote:
"What is today but yesterday's tomorrow?"

Very sophisticated and well written.

ziziluver91 said...
on Mar. 24 2009 at 12:42 am
This poem is so true and good! i can totally relate to it completely..sometimes they are better off not knowing..

on Mar. 17 2009 at 10:54 pm
project827 GOLD, Portage, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Real Revolution Starts At Learning, If You're Not Angry, Then You Are Not Paying Attention" - Tim McIlrath

very good, very good.

neenee111 said...
on Mar. 17 2009 at 8:31 pm
I like how you worded the poem. It was great and I can relate.

on Mar. 17 2009 at 12:39 pm
LusciousKitten SILVER, New York, New York
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Writing is my LIFE, Life is my INSPIRATION

I can totally understand the poem itz amazing and i feel what ur saying

on Mar. 14 2009 at 11:36 pm
jessigene915 BRONZE, New Orleans, Louisiana
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I really enjoyed reading this poem because your point is very clear and I can relate to what you are saying.

mandygale77 said...
on Mar. 14 2009 at 4:41 pm
Wow, that was really good! Deep, great language usage, the works. I'm not quite sure I agree with your point, as I'm actually pretty close to my mother (not my dad, though, ugh) but I understand it, at least. There's some things people just can't know.

on Mar. 14 2009 at 3:46 pm
xx19babytavy94xx BRONZE, Indianapolis, Indiana
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I totally see where you're coming from. My mother and I are very close and she says I can tell her everything, but there's always going to be something that she's better off not knowing. I don't keep these things secrets because I don't love her, it's just a necessary precaution. The comparison of secrets to puzzle pieces is very true. Once you obtain enough secrets they all start to put themselves together in a way that makes sense. Keep on writing, you're inspirational! :]

on Mar. 14 2009 at 4:16 am
dontcryformeArgentina BRONZE, Lebanon, Pennsylvania
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wow thats true..what they dont know cant hurt them...i like you poem



-Amari

on Mar. 13 2009 at 11:40 pm
it was very powerful and mind blowing

you should continue writing excellent word choice tho it was a lil out there which made it realy good

on Mar. 13 2009 at 5:55 pm
Mckenzi Miner, Plainwell, Michigan
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I liked this poem a lot. Because i can relate to this. Good job. :)

Steph247 GOLD said...
on Mar. 13 2009 at 5:11 pm
Steph247 GOLD, Somers, New York
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wow this really inpired me!! this poem has biven me such a great ideas for other peoms! kudos

on Mar. 5 2009 at 12:20 am
Frenchfrylicious, Grizzly Flats, California
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Favorite Quote:
You can do anything you put your mind to!

I loved the style that you used in your writing!

melissa H. said...
on Mar. 4 2009 at 10:39 pm
i really liked it.

it shows deep emotions.

it was great!

on Mar. 4 2009 at 9:06 pm
WHOiNEED2B BRONZE, Tigerton, Wisconsin
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I like the way it seemed to show the emotion. Of that you keep a secret and she knowing still let's you keep it. It shows, and i feel an understanding towards it.


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