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What I could never tell my mother
Isn’t her fault; it’s mine
It’s things wrapped inside of me, coiled like wire with the filament exposed
She could accept them – those things – I’m sure
Maybe even love them the way she loves me; little puzzle pieces
That fell out of the box when we were putting it under the sofa
After we almost finished the puzzle together
But I hide them inside my deepest aorta
Keeping them safe because who wants to grab a still-beating heart?
It would kill me to take those secrets out
So my mother may know they exist
But she lets me keep them.
And maybe that’s the real secret, the one that
Shhhh
She doesn’t know –
It’s that I need some secrets of my own.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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KonyaB!!! This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 3:22 pm:
REALLY GOOD JOB! It's connectable too...everyone has secrets, and they don't need anyone to know about them, even if it IS their mom. Really nice job! :)
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forever_his1993 said...
Jan. 16, 2010 at 12:48 am:
it's really good! keep up the good work! =)
 
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***3Lli3*** said...
Jan. 15, 2010 at 4:51 pm:
I love this its really good.!
Check out my work.. tell me how u like it :)
 
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3Oh!3 said...
Jan. 12, 2010 at 8:48 pm:
i loved this it was beautiful
 
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Allyssandra said...
Jan. 10, 2010 at 5:22 pm:
Good rhythm, you related this to real life very well and, you're right, everyone has a secret or two that they keep close to themselves, nice relations, keep writing, you're very good. :)
 
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oliviarose said...
Jan. 10, 2010 at 2:35 pm:
really well written! Very good.
 
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love&peace123 said...
Jan. 6, 2010 at 4:46 pm:
wonderful word choice, that was great!
 
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life_of_a_leaf said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 9:31 pm:
very true...everyone has secrets.
nice use of figurative language.
 
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cass said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 7:07 pm:
wow this was great it flowed really well and i relate :( youre really good!
 
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8thOrionThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 6:53 pm:
I can almost relate to it...
 
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unicornlover said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 6:43 am:
ur the biggest bost that ive seen thus far
 
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SDBalla531 said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 6:43 am:
10 outa 10
 
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Allegria-Starling said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 5:49 am:
Neat! It's definitely something I (and definitely other people) could relate to, and so well expressed ;)
 
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kungfud00d said...
Jan. 1, 2010 at 5:42 pm:
I really love your word usage and how the whole thing led up to the end. Very well written
 
irenerose This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 2, 2010 at 1:47 pm :
its really great. i feel the same with my mom unfortunately. you put it together well and so that it relates with others. double thumbs up
 
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ilovetinkerbell said...
Dec. 23, 2009 at 8:19 pm:
Great job. I love it because i always feel this way.
merry christmas,
tink
 
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Love_Me_Not said...
Dec. 15, 2009 at 4:39 pm:
Wow. I enjoyed reading that. Sometimes I feel the same way.
 
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*JustDance* said...
Dec. 13, 2009 at 10:52 pm:
The last few lines were beautiful
 
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writergirl22 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 13, 2009 at 9:09 pm:
i love the last two lines :)
 
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disneylover94 said...
Dec. 13, 2009 at 1:56 pm:
<3 this is sooo good. i can totally agree with it. wonderful poem, very meaningful
 
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