Always alone

December 5, 2011
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I move state to state

but no love for me

I move place to place

but no love for me


I move from school to school

but no love for me

I see so many people

but no love for me


I am alone in this world

but one day

I will have a love just right for me

Then i wouldn't be so lonely





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DawningCelesta said...
Jan. 9, 2012 at 3:01 pm
Thanks for writing! This poem really reflected a lot of what I was trying to incorporate in my book... if you could check it out that would be great!
 
MoraleAsh said...
Jan. 6, 2012 at 10:03 pm
I feel bad saying that this piece is cute but the format and the rhyming make it seem that way. The topic is intense and I like that. But I'm going to comment the same thing on this article as I did on the last one: I think it's generic. I've heard it all before. I love your rhyming and meter and some of your content but you should add more personality and more details. Those very important things will make your work more unique. Also, you might want to play around with punctuations-they help po... (more »)
 
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