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no one told me how hard it would be

November 30, 2011
By carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 248 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind


Seeing everyone with their loved ones
making me feel left out
tears rushing down my face like rain rushing down the window
I just wanna run from my fears and problems
Trying to erase all the memories from what I once had
needing friends more then ever
trying to find a soul mate to help me feel better
Always having a close friend near is a good idea
But now the friend is gone so I feel empty
running into my ex brings back the good memories
trying to find things to get my mind off the break up but some things make it worse
First year we were officially dating
people questioned us and tried to make us a better couple then we were


The author's comments:
i was working in hw hour at my school thinking about my ex bf and me. working on this made me sad when my friends and teachers read it they told me it almost made them cry

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TapTap SILVER said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 2:40 pm
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
8 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.

i agree...its beautiful it maybe just needs 2 flow a little bit more? i know its heartfelt but yeah...i still love it!!!

Matice BRONZE said...
on Dec. 15 2011 at 3:08 pm
Matice BRONZE, O&#39Fallon, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Maria, first, let me say that you will most certainly regret it. Second, let me say that I'm in."-Smith

You did a great job. I think you could possibly work on making the poem flow a bit more smoothly, but I did like the chopiness of it. Ironing out a few bumps would really do a lot. Other then that, you did an amazing job! Keep writing! :)

If you have a spare second, I'd love it if you would take a check out and rate/comment on some of my work.


on Dec. 15 2011 at 1:33 pm
Future_Worlder PLATINUM, Council Bluffs, Iowa
22 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Carpe Diem!

whoever created break-ups deserves to be shot or something

on Dec. 15 2011 at 9:09 am
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 248 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

thanks a lot

on Dec. 14 2011 at 7:03 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1646 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Okay, I have a bit of criticism.

1.  '...needing friends more then ever..."  'then' should be 'than' because you're comparing something.

2. This is just a pet peeve of mine, but you really should capitalize the first letter of all the important words in your title.

Other than those minor things, I think this is a great poem!  Good work!


on Dec. 14 2011 at 6:56 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 248 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

who knows?

on Dec. 14 2011 at 2:20 pm
Future_Worlder PLATINUM, Council Bluffs, Iowa
22 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Carpe Diem!

y did the world make break-ups so hard? y?

on Dec. 14 2011 at 8:43 am
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 248 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

ikr it stinks my ex even wants to be back with his new girlfriend

on Dec. 14 2011 at 7:41 am
Future_Worlder PLATINUM, Council Bluffs, Iowa
22 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Carpe Diem!

i hate it when i see ex's being happy and im all alone

on Dec. 13 2011 at 2:42 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 248 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

ikr thats how i feel everyday

on Dec. 13 2011 at 2:40 pm
Future_Worlder PLATINUM, Council Bluffs, Iowa
22 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Carpe Diem!

i feel like this every time i see one of my ex's in the halls and when i see my friends kissing and hugging their boyfriends or girlfriends