Trees of Ash

November 23, 2011
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Trees of dark ash
Surround the forest of gray
Red embers spark beneath
My feet on the orange grass of blaze

Black dulls the sky
Smell of smoke arises
From the dead forest day
It brushes and sways above the loam
Mounting high and above
Almost reaching the sky

My hand touches the wilted foliage
That runs through my fingers like sand
Smell of demise burns my eyes
Leaving a trail of weeps
Left to follow

I hear screams and whimpers coming
Deep down the dark trail where
Misery lies ahead
Leaving most to their grave while
Sadden faces leaves memorizing

Clouds run heavily through the sky
Of murk
Daze and bewilderment
Stains faces of those who
Watch it smolder and
Splinter to the ground of blackness

Dreary is what fills
The existence that defies
Life and the
Trees of Ash

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BrokenBree said...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 4:41 pm
Wow! This is really an amazing piece. I really liked the imagery and the fact that there wasn't a true rhyme scheme. Keep writing(:
Kayla1115 replied...
Jan. 3, 2012 at 6:10 pm
Thank you for the comment, and yeah I'm not much of a rhyming poet. I just never seem to do quite well with rhyming words. Lol! And I will surelly keep writing! Thnks :)
LoudDreamer replied...
Jan. 23, 2012 at 10:43 am
Great job, love it! It almost seems like a discrition of H.e.ll, but it also seemed a little familiar..... or maybe I've just heard he.ll discribed alot, since my older sibs are fond of writing stories about the Apocolypse. What was it you were discribing?
Cody_Goelz said...
Dec. 16, 2011 at 9:30 am

this is amazing I love your sense of imagery it makes me feel like i am there this is really good keep up the good work


Kayla1115 replied...
Dec. 22, 2011 at 9:32 am
Thnks for the great comment. I'm glad that you liked the imagery, beacause that was my main focus was to bring the reader into the scene. Thnks again!! :)
PI_CA_BO said...
Dec. 16, 2011 at 9:12 am
I think you did a very good job on this poem.  I love free verses and my favorite was on the orange grass of blaze.  Keep writing cause i'm waiting for more.
Kayla1115 replied...
Dec. 16, 2011 at 9:22 am
Lol you are too funny! Thks for you lovely comment and i will surely write some more stories for those to be enteratined.  :) ;)
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