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November 30, 2011
By KWeiberg321 SILVER, Cocoa, Florida
KWeiberg321 SILVER, Cocoa, Florida
8 articles 1 photo 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I figure life is a gift and I don't intend on wasting it. You don't know what hand you're gonna get dealt next. You learn to take life as it comes at you...to make each day count."


Dreams have became my reality,
I have lost all my mentality.
I see you two,
And then I see us boo.
I gave you my heart,
But then you tore it apart.
I show you my smile, it's so fake.
But, it was always yours to take.
I thought you'd be mine forever.
And we'd always be together.
Whatever happened to the glow you said you saw upon my face?
Look at me, you've turned me into a mental case.
Do you see how much this is killing me?
Wondering, if this is all we'll ever be.
You, the words I script.
And, me, the dirt you kick.

The author's comments:
I experience my first love and got my heart broken, after that I poured myself into writing. This is one of my favorite pieces that I wrote during that experience. But, there are more to come.

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Aaka131 SILVER said...
on Feb. 9 2012 at 6:06 pm
Aaka131 SILVER, Dunbar, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

I also would have to disagree with the use of the word "boo", but other than that its great! I really like it and it is easy to relate to for sure.

on Dec. 11 2011 at 2:32 pm
KWeiberg321 SILVER, Cocoa, Florida
8 articles 1 photo 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I figure life is a gift and I don't intend on wasting it. You don't know what hand you're gonna get dealt next. You learn to take life as it comes at you...to make each day count."

Thanks for the honesty. (: & I know. I just kind of tossed 'boo' in there to rhyme with too. I was trying to maintain the same rhyme scheme through out the poem.

on Dec. 11 2011 at 2:28 pm
Plain-Jane ELITE, Grandview, Missouri
108 articles 2 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And the Lamb at the center of the throne will be their Shepherd. He will guide them to springs of living water; and God will wipe away every tear from their eyes." Revelation 7:17

i love this poem because so many can relate! i would avoid using the word "boo". and also the syllables are awkward in some places.


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