Confused

December 5, 2011
By LvuKat GOLD, Saskatoon, Other
LvuKat GOLD, Saskatoon, Other
11 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love isnt what we live by,
Its what we want to live by.
~kat


Your my greatest dream but my biggest
Nightmare,
Your the reason i cant sleep at
Night,
Your the only way i
Feel,
Your the real reason i m
Here,
You break me, you build me,
And
Dont get how much i
Care!


The author's comments:
Feelings behide thoughts i wont say because i feel he ll figure it out.... :)

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LvuKat GOLD said...
on Dec. 8 2011 at 9:36 pm
LvuKat GOLD, Saskatoon, Other
11 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love isnt what we live by,
Its what we want to live by.
~kat

Awe, well thanks i'm glad to hear you like it.

LvuKat GOLD said...
on Dec. 8 2011 at 9:35 pm
LvuKat GOLD, Saskatoon, Other
11 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love isnt what we live by,
Its what we want to live by.
~kat

I wasn't asking you to say sorry i said sorry for not writing it out the way i wrote it you're is what i meant but instead i put your and i didnt mean to... I enjoy that fact of hearing i could do better and i will work on it. :) thanks so much

seeitasitmay said...
on Dec. 8 2011 at 1:46 pm
seeitasitmay, Tallahassee, Florida
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Sorry if this posts twice; I'm having internet problems. I can't really understand your reply but I think you're requesting I apologize for my comment on your usage of incorrect grammar. I'm afraid I will not. I liked your poem; it has nice rhythm and a relatable topic. That being said however, I think it is quite obvious that the use of "your" instead of "you're" is not purposeful. My only point in the comment was not to just chide but to encourage you to be more serious and careful with your writing. If you are a serious writer, or intend to be, you will often be criticized for much worse. Some people will tell you that they do not like your writing at all; will you demand that they apologize? I certainly hope not. I work as an intern editor for a magazine and my work is constantly nit-picked by my superior but rather than walk away with hurt feelings, I improve my work. I hope you do the same and continue your work.

Best Regards.


on Dec. 8 2011 at 8:27 am
stephjbean BRONZE, Verona, Wisconsin
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Keep writing, your poem echo's my current unrequited love. Awesome voice.

LvuKat GOLD said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 9:21 pm
LvuKat GOLD, Saskatoon, Other
11 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love isnt what we live by,
Its what we want to live by.
~kat

Maybe i wrote it like that but just put your sorry... :/

seeitasitmay said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 8:59 pm
seeitasitmay, Tallahassee, Florida
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I would like it a lot more if you used *you're

LvuKat GOLD said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 5:56 pm
LvuKat GOLD, Saskatoon, Other
11 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love isnt what we live by,
Its what we want to live by.
~kat

Awee thanks....it comes to me and i write like crazy!

shaq96 SILVER said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 5:39 pm
shaq96 SILVER, Newton, North Carolina
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Hey I like it your good!




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