Cloud Nine Blue

November 29, 2011
By KShep12 GOLD, Lake Butler, Florida
KShep12 GOLD, Lake Butler, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"It isn't where you came from, its where you're going that counts." -Ella Fitzgerald


Those crystal blue eyes
send me cloud nine.
Within the time we talk,
I can't help but smile.
Baby you're my ship,
you send me out to sea.
Perfect we shall be,
I love the sound of 'we'.
We could be that couple
that everyone envies.
Baby this is it.
We will make it work.


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on Dec. 9 2011 at 8:19 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

I agree with wonderment, this is just too cute! great job.

on Dec. 3 2011 at 1:35 pm
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
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I likeit, its cute

jaselisa GOLD said...
on Dec. 3 2011 at 1:26 pm
jaselisa GOLD, Greensboro, Maryland
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i liked that

KShep12 GOLD said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 3:49 pm
KShep12 GOLD, Lake Butler, Florida
10 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It isn't where you came from, its where you're going that counts." -Ella Fitzgerald

I never even noticed that :)

on Dec. 2 2011 at 3:47 pm
AmieeHope-Sierra GOLD, Royston, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
And There Will Come A Time, You'll See, With No More Tears. And Love Will Not Break Your Heart, But Dismiss Your Fears.

Lovely this poem reminds me of my first love and it shall be my only love. I won't ever love anyone the same.

on Dec. 2 2011 at 3:43 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

Nice.  I like how the rhyming flows. Sea, be, we, (then it's interrupted, nice touch) envies.  Brilliant.

on Dec. 1 2011 at 10:32 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
1 article 0 photos 629 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Great work, I especially love the line "Perfect we shall be,/I love the sound of 'we'." You should be carfull using reverse syntax (Yoda speak)like that, in most places if you do that only once in a poem it stands out to much and throws of the flow a bit. You did it well there, though, I liked it. I gave you four stars.


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