Cloud Nine Blue

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Those crystal blue eyes
send me cloud nine.
Within the time we talk,
I can't help but smile.
Baby you're my ship,
you send me out to sea.
Perfect we shall be,
I love the sound of 'we'.
We could be that couple
that everyone envies.
Baby this is it.
We will make it work.





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Wonderment said...
Dec. 3, 2011 at 1:35 pm
I likeit, its cute
 
LoudDreamer replied...
Dec. 9, 2011 at 8:19 am
I agree with wonderment, this is just too cute! great job.
 
jaselisa said...
Dec. 3, 2011 at 1:26 pm
i liked that
 
JamieNicole said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 3:47 pm
Lovely this poem reminds me of my first love and it shall be my only love. I won't ever love anyone the same.
 
FlaviusJacobiusOssummuss said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 3:43 pm
Nice.  I like how the rhyming flows. Sea, be, we, (then it's interrupted, nice touch) envies.  Brilliant.
 
KShep12 replied...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 3:49 pm
I never even noticed that :)
 
LoudDreamer said...
Dec. 1, 2011 at 10:32 am
Great work, I especially love the line "Perfect we shall be,/I love the sound of 'we'." You should be carfull using reverse syntax (Yoda speak)like that, in most places if you do that only once in a poem it stands out to much and throws of the flow a bit. You did it well there, though, I liked it. I gave you four stars.
 
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