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Collision of Destruction/Collision of Fate.

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Two minds alternate into one.
This decison was initiated by both souls.
I thought this was what I wanted.
I thought this was the life of praise and recognition.
The typical brain is now thinking for multiple.
Two minds rapidly drift apart.
This decision was prompted by one single act of inconsideration.
This was never what I wanted.
The typical brain is once more thinking for one.
The original decison is shifting out of place.
The two minds are presumed to be further and further apart,
with each passing day.
This is the treacherous collision of destruction.
This is the collision of fate.



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Donahue8 said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 6:40 pm:
a little a obscure, but very cleaver. I love the wording.
 
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tay.la said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 6:26 pm:

i really like this one, and by all means take my suggestion with a grain of salt, but I feel like the last two lines could be more effective as one, like "...collision of fated destruction."  I feel like destruction is a more powerful word to end on...it resonates really nicely in the mind after

 

 
tay.la replied...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 6:27 pm :
maybe destructions instead of destruction? i dont know
 
sunshine7223 replied...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 6:44 pm :
Thank you! I actually agree with you now that I think about it! Thank you bunches! I can see where your coming from completely. Thank you for the advice. :)
 
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MsAnonymousThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 5:03 pm:
very nice! it made me think and i love poems that make me think
 
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