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Don't Turn Your Back.

November 30, 2011
By sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me


So many disasters in the world,
what causes these events to unfurl?
Is it the cold heartlessness of a brutal man?
The start of a young girl's tragedy begins with "get in my van."
So many disasters in the world,
what causes these events to unfurl?
Is it the jealousy and selfishness of a bitter woman?
The plot in mind, she's wondering where to begin.
Her husband is severely ill, her only concern is life insurance,
her impatience and lack of heart, results in great endurance.
He lays on the floor dying, she bludgeoned him with a chair,
he cries out in pain, but she's far too vicious to care.
She doesn't fall or stumble, she watches him slowly die,
she calls the paramedics, and creates a horrific lie.
She says she was defending herself against her husband,
little do they know, she put his life to an end.
He was defenseless, and had done no wrong to his love,
he never would have suspected, or even thought of,
the possibility that his spouse could take his life,
but she did, isn't she a wonderful wife?
That little girl who got in the van, lost her youth,
her family is still being haunted by the truth.
She was bound and raped,
she had no chance to escape.
She was tortured, and left for death in a pool of blood,
her killer has no remorse, his heart is just a flood.
She is another victim, along with all of the others,
did he even think of the affect left on the mothers?
So many disasters in this world,
what causes these events to unfurl?
Will it always be a mystery, why is there so much hate?
Will we ever know, or will we only contemplate?
So many of these monsters continue to shape,
another hideous soul, another lost trait.
What is wrong with humanity, why must we commit such acts?
These matters will always be an issue, if we simply turn our backs.
So many disasters in the world,
what causes these events to unfurl?
Don't turn your back.


The author's comments:
I wrote this piece after watching a few T.V shows based on such incidents. It disgusts me how people can commit such acts.

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on Dec. 10 2011 at 1:21 am
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

Thank you SO much. (:

on Dec. 10 2011 at 1:11 am
youngspeare BRONZE, Nairobi, Other
1 article 0 photos 273 comments

Favorite Quote:
We wouldn't ask a rose that grew from the concrete for having damaged petals; in turn we'd all celebrate its tenacity, we'd all love tz will to reach the sun well we are the roses n these are my damaged petals don't ask me why thank God and ask me how

Darn it! This is beautiful! People just close their eyes and refuse to see the injustice around..anyway great job! You deserve a 5/5!

on Dec. 6 2011 at 11:57 pm
ms.nerdalicious GOLD, Orlando, Florida
16 articles 1 photo 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A bird doesn't sing because it has an answer, it sings because it has a song."
— Maya Angelou

no problem! Loved it!

on Dec. 6 2011 at 11:54 pm
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

Thank you!

on Dec. 6 2011 at 11:31 pm
ms.nerdalicious GOLD, Orlando, Florida
16 articles 1 photo 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A bird doesn't sing because it has an answer, it sings because it has a song."
— Maya Angelou

Wow. That is really intense! Nice job!

Shsme BRONZE said...
on Dec. 6 2011 at 12:47 am
Shsme BRONZE, Oakland, California
3 articles 0 photos 6 comments

very emotinal great

 


on Dec. 5 2011 at 2:22 am
iloveu32 SILVER, Las Vegas, Nevada
9 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nobody can make you feel inferior without their consent. -Eleanor Roosevelt

i rly rly like this, it makes you think and it is written well :) grt job!

 


on Dec. 3 2011 at 4:01 pm
ArielleArmageddon PLATINUM, Charlotte, North Carolina
45 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
if i cant hear your heartbeat, you're too far away

well you read one of my poems and saw how i tend to rhyme on and off...

on Dec. 3 2011 at 3:51 pm
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

Thank you! (: And I don't know, lol. I guess I just do it. It really comes to me naturally. I love to rhyme, and I love to exploit a message at the same time. :) Are you any good at rhyming?

on Dec. 3 2011 at 3:47 pm
ArielleArmageddon PLATINUM, Charlotte, North Carolina
45 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
if i cant hear your heartbeat, you're too far away

i really love this. it reminds me of how i had to think on the streets of moscow when i still lived in russia. how are you able to keep a rhyme like that and still say what you want... if my question makes any sense

on Dec. 3 2011 at 3:22 pm
misstywaterfall SILVER, N/a, Massachusetts
5 articles 1 photo 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you dont understand my silence how will you understand my words"

i love the honesty it touches on issues people deal with all the time . i love it (:

on Dec. 3 2011 at 7:52 am
Yurriane BRONZE, Tokyo, Other
2 articles 0 photos 13 comments

I think that your piece realy speaks the truth that people tend to ignore because they can`t do anything about it...it is sad but nevertheless powerful.

 

Great job!!!!!!


on Dec. 3 2011 at 2:40 am
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

((: Will do! You do the same. I'd love to read yours as well!

on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:55 pm
Donahue8 BRONZE, Lansdale, Pennsylvania
4 articles 1 photo 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The only easy day was Yesterday" -U.S. Navy SEALs

thankstime! and let me know when you post new stuff, I'd love to read it

on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:43 pm
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

So sweet of you Tay.La! Thank you so much for you feedback! It really means so much! :))

on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:42 pm
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

WOW! That is the nicest comment I have received as of yet! Thank you SO much! :) That means more than you know.

on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:37 pm
Donahue8 BRONZE, Lansdale, Pennsylvania
4 articles 1 photo 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The only easy day was Yesterday" -U.S. Navy SEALs

WOW.... this is reallly amazing. thought provoking and powerful. It is the best piece I've read so far on this website. I really like it!

tiptop said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:23 pm
tiptop, --, Other
0 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
heaven is a place / a place where nothing / nothing ever happens.

first of all, in your piece dont turn your back, i am envious of your ability to rhyme...my greatest struggle lol.  and secondly, to a generic question posed by anyone and to make it interesting.  For example, jealousy.  it drives me insane when people write poetry about it because it's so abused as a topic--however, youve done it delicately and perfectly.  youve given in the level of sophistication it deserves

on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:06 pm
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

Thank you so much!

Jeast10 GOLD said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:01 pm
Jeast10 GOLD, Beaumont, Texas
10 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"when nothing goes right... go left."

sooo good, sunny! i had goosebumps!