In the forest

November 28, 2011
I sit alone.
In a dark forest,
Surrounded by silence,
Tears falling fast.
The knife in my hand
Screams pierce my ears
I turn
but still I am alone
I lay
My tender head on the fallen leaves,
It's cold
but I hardly notice.
I sigh
My mind is clouded,
My eye are heavy,
and so is my body.
I wake
A patch of sun hits my face
Its beautiful, this forest
Quiet, peaceful, serene.
I will come back again...

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JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 4:01 pm
This sounds sad to me...but then towards the end it seems as if you (or whoever's point of view you were writing from) had been going through a slow, alone, and very depressing time, but then finally woke up one day and decided, "I will come back again..." like back to happiness....or idk maybe you left/lost something and went back to it...whatever, thats just my interpretation, but anyway, really great job! =) The way you broke it up kind of gives it suspense and drama...5 outta 5!
Kitty.Meow.Daly replied...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 4:12 pm
Thank you very much and yes it was supposed to sound like I was going through a depressing alone time and I finally broke out of it
Matice said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 4:58 pm

I really liked the way your style was a little broken up. But at the same time, it wasn't too broken. It made nice, smooth transitions.

Good job!

Kitty.Meow.Daly replied...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 5:35 pm
Thank you :)
wordjunkie said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 9:36 pm
That was really interesting. it was quiet, and I'm not sure I get it, but I like it.
Kitty.Meow.Daly replied...
Dec. 1, 2011 at 6:22 am
When I wrote it my thoughts were kind of broken, so I tried to piece it together to show that she was thinking improperly, having second thoughts on taking her life. It is confusing but I tried :)
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