Fairytale

November 24, 2011
By Inksy SILVER, NSL, Utah
Inksy SILVER, NSL, Utah
7 articles 0 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Three can keep a secret if two of them are dead"
~Benjamin Frankiln
"Love? Above all things I believe in love. Love is like oxygen. Love is a many splendored thing. Love lifts us up where we belong. All you need is love."
~Moulin Rouge


Once upon a time in a land far away,
There was the perfect boy,
And a not so perfect girl.
He was the fun one with all the friends,
She was the shy girl with a lot to say.
She never thought he’d give her a second glance,
Until the day their eyes met.
It was a fairytale moment,
With fireworks and magic in those silent seconds,
So much was said in a glance that neither could understand.
And the girl started to daydream and wonder.
They never spoke before,
That perfect boy and not so perfect girl,
Aside from their amazing conversations,
Between her bright blues and his warm brown eyes.
Until that day,
When he flashed her a perfect smile,
And walked his perfect walk,
To where she was always waiting.
She became is princess in the way he had always been her prince.
Their chat was what most would consider normal.
But it was then that the not so perfect girl,
And that oh, so perfect boy,
Fell in love.
I am that not so perfect girl,
And this is for my perfect boy.


The author's comments:
This is really old, but it made me smile when I read it after so long, despite the cliches (:

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on Mar. 7 2012 at 5:31 pm
Kparker27 PLATINUM, Groesbeck, Texas
30 articles 17 photos 101 comments

Favorite Quote:
"In the end, it's still best to wait for the one we want rather than settle for what's available. It's still best to wait for the one you love rather than to settle for the one who's around. It's still best to wait for the right person, because life's too short to waste on the wrong one."

This was sooo cute and really written well. Good Job!! 

Inksy SILVER said...
on Feb. 4 2012 at 1:09 am
Inksy SILVER, NSL, Utah
7 articles 0 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Three can keep a secret if two of them are dead"
~Benjamin Frankiln
"Love? Above all things I believe in love. Love is like oxygen. Love is a many splendored thing. Love lifts us up where we belong. All you need is love."
~Moulin Rouge

Thanks everyone (:

on Feb. 1 2012 at 7:34 am
myraahmad SILVER, Wah Cantt, Dist. Rawalpindi, Other
5 articles 1 photo 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have a dream...

Awww.. That's so cute! :)

Haylynn GOLD said...
on Feb. 1 2012 at 6:45 am
Haylynn GOLD, Skiatook, Oklahoma
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This is adorable (: I love it!

on Jan. 28 2012 at 9:29 am
LittleUggie BRONZE, Cookeville, Tennessee
4 articles 3 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you can't be a good example, you'll just have to be a horrible warning. -Jennifer Crusie

This is a really cute poem, All it needs is a happily ever after. Good luck!

on Jan. 19 2012 at 2:33 pm
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

aww... this is so sweet- I love the start "once upon a time"- it's so normal- but it makes it so much better- I really like this poem because it's so easy to understand

on Jan. 14 2012 at 2:16 pm
Savannalore SILVER, North Branch, South Dakota
9 articles 17 photos 121 comments

Favorite Quote:
Art is all about mistakes and knowing which ones to keep.

I love this, it tells the perfect story! It wrapped up great, with no loose ends. It was simple, which was what drew me in because a lot of poets try too hard to be intricate. Yours was perfect:) Five stars:)

Phina ELITE said...
on Jan. 12 2012 at 10:17 am
Phina ELITE, Fort Wayne, Indiana
103 articles 18 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some of the best and most beautiful things cannot be seen or even touched, they must be felt with the heart." Helen Keller

I think that the cliches of this piece only highlight the way the writer actually feels, because not every moment in life is a wow moment with the most awesome thing that can be said, often what comes out is corny and cute, but still heartfelt, I think you absolutely nailed this piece on the head for every girl that finds her "perfect boy." It's beautiful Inksplotch, and I hope to see more of it.

AvaJay GOLD said...
on Dec. 12 2011 at 10:43 am
AvaJay GOLD, Spokane, Washington
13 articles 4 photos 184 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me not pray to be sheltered from dangers, but to be fearless in facing them. Let me not pray for the stilling of my pain, but for the heart to conquer it.
~ Tagore

Aw, this is really sweet. I loved it :)

on Dec. 5 2011 at 6:43 am
KenzieHockey123 BRONZE, Cedaar Rapids, Iowa
3 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's not who you are that holds you back, it's who you think you're not."

I really love this :) 5/5 & favorite :)

on Dec. 4 2011 at 10:40 pm
poetface SILVER, Woodruff, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
“Waste no more time arguing about what a good man should be. Be one.” Marcus Aurelius

I really like this because of the imagery I see, and it is so easy to take in. I feel this alot. :))

Inksy SILVER said...
on Dec. 3 2011 at 1:28 am
Inksy SILVER, NSL, Utah
7 articles 0 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Three can keep a secret if two of them are dead"
~Benjamin Frankiln
"Love? Above all things I believe in love. Love is like oxygen. Love is a many splendored thing. Love lifts us up where we belong. All you need is love."
~Moulin Rouge

Oh my gosh, that's one of the best compliments I've recieved (: Thank you so much!

Inksy SILVER said...
on Dec. 3 2011 at 1:28 am
Inksy SILVER, NSL, Utah
7 articles 0 photos 89 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Three can keep a secret if two of them are dead"
~Benjamin Frankiln
"Love? Above all things I believe in love. Love is like oxygen. Love is a many splendored thing. Love lifts us up where we belong. All you need is love."
~Moulin Rouge

Thank you so much (: I'll definitely check it out!

 


on Dec. 2 2011 at 7:45 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
1 article 0 photos 629 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Hey, do you think you could check out some of my work? There is one called Lonely Fires I think you'll like. It is aciedentally anonymous poem so you would have to do a search for it if you do decide to take a look. It would mean alot to me, I liked your work so much I put this poem up on my favs

on Dec. 2 2011 at 7:38 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
1 article 0 photos 629 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Oh, my gosh, I love this! I don't like many of the free verse poems, so that says alot.(when free verse is good, its really good, but when its bad its REALLY BAD, not naming any names, though.) My favorite lines are "When he flashed her a perfect smile,/And walked his perfect walk/ To where she was always waiting." And the last two lines are great aswell. Awsome job, Inksplotch, Five stars!




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