A Suicide Story

November 24, 2011
Hi, my name is Richard,
I am four years old.
I live here with my Mommy and Daddy
Its very lonely.

Will you be my friend?
Will you play with me?
Or will you point and laugh at me like everyone else.

No, your nice.
Not like my Mommy or Daddy.
See this? Its a gash,
I got it when Daddy hit me.
He hit me with his bottle.

Shh, I hear something,
Oh no its him
His back
Quick hide!

Do you hear that, he called my name.
He sounds angrier than usual,
I better go before he comes up,
Who knows... maybe he will only yell if I hurry.

Do you feel that?
Its very strange.
Do you see that?
Its scary.

I'm scared!
No! Daddy NO!
I promise I’ll be good,
I promise I’ll never speak again,
Please, please, PLEASE!

Its too late,
Its over.
Wait! What is this?
What is this feeling?
No it can't be, it is harsh.
No, I'm not scared.
Its gentle kind and suiting.

Who are you?
Where am I?
What is this?
Everything is clean, everything is nice, everything is love
This must be heaven
Its just like the pictures in my books.

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JaneCapelle This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 15, 2012 at 6:04 pm
I'm speechless. 5/5
swifthearth replied...
Jan. 15, 2012 at 6:29 pm
LOl, thank you soo much.
poeta said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 5:40 am
This is simply amazing, One of the best poems I have seen so far. The poem just flowed perfectly and wow. The emotion was properly conveyed. I just wish you could have modified the last verse abit to make it flow better. and the titles was a bit off, compared to the story itself. other than that, it was a magnificent poem.
cookiestar said...
Jan. 5, 2012 at 6:06 am
Wow, I love the way its'written:). it's a great poem. It's emotional and beautiful.
swifthearth replied...
Jan. 6, 2012 at 6:27 am
Thanks cook, I appreciate the complement.
TawnyNerd1995 said...
Jan. 5, 2012 at 6:05 am
ohmy goodness. this gave me chills! excellent job :)
swifthearth replied...
Jan. 6, 2012 at 6:26 am
Thank you very much
InvisibleHeart said...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 9:56 pm
Very nice. :)
swifthearth replied...
Jan. 5, 2012 at 6:04 am
Thank you very much. I really like urs too
shortyL98 said...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 11:40 am
nicely done! XD
swifthearth replied...
Jan. 3, 2012 at 12:20 pm
thank you very much for taking your time to read this poem :D
Sarakins said...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 10:57 am
Nice job, Swift! Gave me serious chill, mann
swifthearth replied...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 11:05 am
Thank you sara
U2_Fanatic said...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 10:32 am
WOW. [b] NICE [/b] Swift!
swifthearth replied...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 10:33 am
Triumphant said...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 10:31 am
This gave me chills :o keep writing!
swifthearth replied...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 5:37 am
thank YOU so much.
josika said...
Dec. 30, 2011 at 1:18 am
scary.......but very well written. keep it up!
swifthearth replied...
Jan. 2, 2012 at 10:32 am
Thanks, I appreciate it.
Margaret252 said...
Dec. 30, 2011 at 1:16 am
diz z jst so touchin...
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