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The Moon and The Sun

All was good, bright, and fun when the moon fell in love with the sun
All was right in late June when the sun fell in love with the moon
Then the moon said goodbye as down came the November rain
With tears in her eyes, the sun vowed to never fall in love again



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ReneeB said...
Jul. 17, 2012 at 1:30 pm:
Very lovely. I love the personification, and the idea of the sun and moon together. Great job! :)
 
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On.My.OwnThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 13, 2012 at 6:51 pm:
That was awesome. I loved it!
 
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KateLAThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 5:45 pm:
This is really creative-it's fun and whimsical, I really like it because I'm into astrology! 5/5!
 
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LittleSully said...
Apr. 4, 2012 at 7:53 pm:
This is really great, keep up the good work:)
 
Fire..This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 9:44 am :
I just wish it were a tad longer... I don't know, it feels like you could add a stanza or two to the front. but I like the flow of it, and especially the ending!
 
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