Gazing at the stars

November 26, 2011
By RaNdOm PLATINUM, Davenport, Iowa
RaNdOm PLATINUM, Davenport, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
love doesn't hurt. its the pain that comes after you love.


Gazing at the stars is how she breaks free, from her somewhat painful reality....
They unlock her creativity and set her on her feet....
She gazes at the stars in hope,one day those stars will have guided her....
Guided her far away, into her dreams..
Without a doubt, without a fear..
Over the moon, through out time...
Into the rivers, out of a mine...
She will fly high with no boundaries in her mind....
Gazing at the stars she can live again...

The author's comments:
I was kind of upset tonight and started looking out my window, and this popped in my head..

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on Nov. 29 2011 at 4:52 pm
xxtennis13xx SILVER, Clarkston, Michigan
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you switch tenses three times: "she gazes at the stars in hope, one day those stars will have guided her" I am not sure what tense that last part is, but I think the whole poem would sound great in present tense like the beginning is. Also, the ellipses (...) are not needed at the end of each line. It helps the flow not to have them. BUT I really really like this, besides my criticism! It's very well written and a cute idea. (: Check out my things? 

on Nov. 29 2011 at 3:55 pm
Paramour13 GOLD, Morris, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
When life leaves us blind, Love keeps us kind.

I like this :) check out some of my work?


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