Magazine, website & books written by teens since 1989

Prosper Through Ignorance.

Custom User Avatar
More by this author
This life is full of loss and deceptions,
acts of ignorance, and misconceptions.
We don't always see things as they are,
the world spins, but we don't get far.
We continue our daily lives,
constant groans and sighs.
Between night and day, we cannot see the light,
we're immuned to this sense of anger and fright.
Sleepless hours, turn into days of fatigue,
you've convinced yourself your out of your league.
You think the worst, and stress everything little,
Instead of getting to the point, you tend to fiddle.
In the back of your mind, you know your no quitter,
but you'd never expect things would be so bitter.
So you rest your head in your arms,
trying to escape from all that harms.
Your tired of the pain, loss but no gain,
it's all the same, your mind it will strain.
We've come this far, let's go for the mile,
and hope that in the end it's worth while.
We are not certain, but it'd be smart,
It's never too late, too late to start.
People are ignorant, and always will be,
but I will never back down from a bully.
From thinking low of one's self,
to only being concerned with wealth.
From sitting in the background,
watching the earth spin around,
to making others feel low,
we can change the cycle, this I know,
do you know where will you go?
Avoid the worries and ignorance at any cost,
We can still prosper, although we all have lost.



Join the Discussion


This article has 19 comments. Post your own!

Donahue8 said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 6:48 pm:
I like everything except the last line. I dont like the "we have lost" it sounds like you are giving up insted of trying to change it.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Supriya said...
Dec. 1, 2011 at 1:57 pm:
Loved the imagery and the picture you created. Awesome piece!
 
sunshine7223 replied...
Dec. 1, 2011 at 1:58 pm :
Thank you! :)
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Megan15 said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 5:34 pm:
This is a really good poem! It describes how i feel! Keep writing sunshine! (:
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
samwich7This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 5:29 pm:
Usually, I can't stand poetry. But my eyes were glued to the screen, my heart hanging onto your every word. Don't listen to those complaining about rhyming. It's a work of art.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Batsby This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 11:22 pm:
Sometimes I feel as though rhyming stunts the message of a poem, or makes it feel altogether juvenile. This is not at all the case with this piece. The choice of words are amazing and it conveys a message all teens can relate to. I really liked this a whole lot.
 
sunshine7223 replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 11:26 pm :
Batsby! :)) The second nicest comment I have received as of yet! Thanks a whole bunch! :) I appreciate your feedback so very much. :)
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
nikky917 said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 10:55 pm:
You're vocabulary is amazing and I love how well you describe things, love this! :)
 
sunshine7223 replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 10:58 pm :
Well thank you SO much Nikky! Your comment is the nicest comment I have received as of yet. :) You just made my night, and tomorrow morning, Lol. :) Thanks again!
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
megpie000 said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 10:41 pm:

l love this :) its exactly how I feel right now plus it beautifully written :)

 

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
HateKnuckle said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 10:34 pm:
I dont really see the message but I think it has to do with doing the right thing despite not knowing what is coming next in life that scare people. I like the rhyming. A little confusing but thats how poetry is sometimes.
 
sunshine7223 replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 10:49 pm :
Thanks HateKnuckle. I enjoy making my work a little difficult to comprehend. I do so, so that others can take what they will from it, and relate to it in their own way. Yes everyone relates to poetry in their own way initially, but more so if the "meaning" is not so forward. If that's the message you get out of it, that's what the meaning is, to you. That's what poetry is all about to me.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
PrincessBubblegum said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 9:42 pm:

I agree with resonating on the rhyming thing. But otherwise it's good. You might want to seperate it into stanzas for more clarity.

 

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Resonating_Words said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 9:38 pm:

I like it :) As a general preference I'm not a fan of rhyming lines paired back to back, so that was something that bothered me because I'm perpetually irked by it XD So I won't comment on that, because I'm biased

 

But overall, I do like your message.

 
sunshine7223 replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 10:08 pm :
Well thanks guys. (: Thanks for not being a jerk about it, lol. I appreciate your feedback. (:
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
LoudDreamerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 5:29 pm:
Great work, sunshine72223! This is really good! Could you check out mine? I just got my first non-accidentally-anonnymous(try saying that ten times fast) work published, and I would be honored if you would comment on and rate it.
 
sunshine7223 replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 9:25 pm :
Thank you. (: Sure thing, will do. How can I find it? Send me the link? (:
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
praveenbryonadamrocks said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 12:50 am:
Nice one dude......
 
sunshine7223 replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 12:51 am :
Thank you. (:
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Site Feedback