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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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East17 said...
Oct. 17, 2011 at 6:58 pm:
This is great, return the favor and comment on mine? :) it would be greatly appreciated
 
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summerlengyel said...
Oct. 14, 2011 at 7:22 pm:
Wow, that's beautiful. Makes me think
 
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GirlWhoWrote said...
Oct. 14, 2011 at 6:34 pm:
Great job! This poem really made me think. And... speaking of poetry... go check out mine! I only have two, so it's not too hard...
 
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CrystalMarie said...
Oct. 14, 2011 at 11:39 am:
This poem is amazing!
 
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RandomRanda said...
Oct. 12, 2011 at 8:46 am:
it was good.  go look at my poems!
 
MissUnderStood.2011 replied...
Oct. 14, 2011 at 12:02 pm :
you dont have an poems -__-
 
RandomRanda replied...
Oct. 15, 2011 at 4:46 pm :

they havnt added them yet

 

 
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RobynCornejo said...
Oct. 10, 2011 at 10:09 pm:
This is really good! 
 
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hiddenpoet567 said...
Oct. 9, 2011 at 6:50 pm:
Wow, that was really great. I really look forward to reading your other works
 
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Eulalia J. said...
Oct. 9, 2011 at 10:57 am:
Great poem, thought provoking and intelectual...
 
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Greenpaw said...
Oct. 6, 2011 at 11:33 pm:
Wow, this poem was magnificent. Check out my poem, please? I only have one so it shouldn't be too hard to find.
 
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emilybwrites said...
Oct. 6, 2011 at 7:43 pm:
i love this so much! please keep writing!! and everyone, please check out my poem "Forgotten Domain" and comment/rate thanksss:)
 
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swimster16 said...
Oct. 6, 2011 at 7:01 pm:
I absolutely understand what you mean by this poem and the relationships on how parents are afraid to let their kids go, but it will have to happen.  Very good!!!
 
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Nicole.Jones said...
Oct. 6, 2011 at 11:21 am:
I like this poem. It was creative and I got a good picture in my head while I was reading. Good job.
 
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LifeisLife said...
Oct. 5, 2011 at 10:04 pm:
This is a very cute poem! You really created a scene in my head :)
 
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B. said...
Oct. 5, 2011 at 9:29 pm:
AWSOME i love this poem and it really ment something not of course my dad but mt mom in this case totally resembles this poem GOOD JOB!!! :)
 
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mrsenesitive said...
Oct. 4, 2011 at 10:13 am:
i loved this poem it really spoke to me your way better than i am but please check my stuff out
 
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AristotlesApprentice said...
Oct. 3, 2011 at 7:58 pm:
i love the comment below. very humorous. but this a very serious poem as well. i think, now this is just from my point of view, that you are showing how the son thinks that his dad his holding him back (being unencouragable) but whenever he lets him go, the dad sees his success and therefore cheers him on saying he knew he could do it. At the end when he said he saw his father pull on a chain, this shows how still, even though the boy is free, someone is always going to be in control.
 
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Sexxxxyyyy said...
Oct. 3, 2011 at 10:21 am:
your dad seemed very controling!!
 
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mrsenesitive said...
Oct. 3, 2011 at 10:14 am:
really good please check me out
 
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