Broken

November 2, 2011
By country-cutey GOLD, St.croix Falls, Wisconsin
country-cutey GOLD, St.croix Falls, Wisconsin
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont say it if you dont mean it because i might actually belive it


All I see is a broken heart,
Some thing that stands in my way,
A thing so sad it just brings me more down,
It sits there deep down inside of me,
Not just red but more like blue,
Some thing that sings a very sad tone,
A heart that was special,
A heart that was all mine,
Was took all apart and broke away,
Shattered and shamed,
All hidden away,
Locked and put in my chest,
To let me know,
What bad memories,
That brought to me,
All is seen,
All is lost,
Brought back together,
In my very own chest,
It sits with coldness,
It sits with tears,
Hopping some day,
That it can come back,
And gain what it has lost.


The author's comments:
I didnt write this about me but i wrote this about what others feel like when some one shatters them and puts there heart down.

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on Apr. 21 2013 at 8:54 pm
ElisaTheDuck ELITE, Rigaud, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Describe yourself in three words."
"Lazy."

It is so beautiful and so sad.....

on Mar. 28 2013 at 11:26 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

Its a really good poem makes me think of the things i keep hidden, you have very good flow and rythm

Armyj13 SILVER said...
on Mar. 7 2013 at 5:48 pm
Armyj13 SILVER, Traskwood, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
The only easy day; was yesterday.

This is a good poem.. I like your work. It makes me think of everything that I sometimes think about.. Its beautiful.

on Feb. 26 2013 at 8:26 pm
Happymask PLATINUM, Pride, Louisiana
22 articles 3 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have great faith in fools, self-confidence my friends call it." - Edgar Allan Poe

This isn't bad but I do have a sggestion: you said you didn't write it about yourself, why not? Try write it about yourself next time to make it connect a bit more. But it's still good :)

on Aug. 10 2012 at 11:15 am
AcidRoses SILVER, Elmont, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Many that live deserve death and some that have died deserve life, can you give that to them? Do not be to hasty to deal out death and judgement, even the very wise cannot see all ends."


"Can't get no more free randy!"

This does describe a lot of people well. People do often get like this and I see a lot which is why this poem is so great.

hypermagical said...
on Jun. 13 2012 at 9:42 am
hypermagical, Indianapolis, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
You can quote me on that.

Once again, you've done a wondeful job conveying your thoughts and emotions. Cutie, you make a great connection with your reader, a talent that only the best have. :)

on Feb. 20 2012 at 1:22 pm
onedaymore143 SILVER, Conifer, Colorado
8 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
I wanna be the girl he gives his hoddies to, and cuddels up to when its cold, He'll be the one who comes up behind me and wraps his arms around his waist, catchs off gaurd and says you are beautiful.

this is really good. you are very poetic and insperational

on Jan. 23 2012 at 5:09 pm
country-cutey GOLD, St.croix Falls, Wisconsin
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont say it if you dont mean it because i might actually belive it

thx :) i am glad u liked it

on Jan. 22 2012 at 10:38 am
livelovesmile GOLD, Gaithersburg, Maryland
19 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am like a star burst. A juicy contradiction. I'm hard to figure out, but when you get to my center, your suprised! It's not what you thought it would be, huh.

this is really good at conveying your emotions and the rhyme doesn't seem forced at all! nice job!

cookiestar said...
on Jan. 13 2012 at 10:22 am
Wow, this is amazing:). It's beautiful. I loved it!

on Dec. 30 2011 at 12:06 pm
SophiaWood GOLD, New City, New York
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THIS IS REALLY GOOD. Dont you dare say your a bad writter because then you would be lieing and thats bad. I love this. Keep on writting!

on Dec. 30 2011 at 11:11 am
ashlyn939 PLATINUM, Lynchburg, Virginia
34 articles 14 photos 75 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love means holding on to someone just as hard as you can because if you don't, one blink and they might disappear... forever." -Ellen Hopkins, Impulse

THis is really good describes how I'm feeling rite now:/ keep writing


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