My Little Candle

November 20, 2011
By clumsyteardropper SILVER, Roslyn, Pennsylvania
clumsyteardropper SILVER, Roslyn, Pennsylvania
8 articles 0 photos 87 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You can't help others, if you yourself need help" -my sister ;) love it!


There was a lady dancing in a bright dress with light blue lace.
She moved so softly when there’s a slight shift in the air.
This lady melted the ground beneath her, and yet she still stood.
Might I have let out a heavy sigh, she suddenly wouldn’t be there.

There was a lady dancing with the sweet smell of cool cucumber perfume.
The pool around her mirrored her every shining sway.
Light and warmth is a gift she had other than just dance.
But now she’s gone with a strange mist that follows her away
From the top of my little candle.


The author's comments:
I wrote this when I was younger, since I thought the way a flame danced was so fascinating.

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eliana924 GOLD said...
on Jan. 1 2012 at 12:13 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
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I think this is my favorite out of your pieces. I love the imagery and implicit meaning of the metaphor!

on Dec. 24 2011 at 4:18 pm
clumsyteardropper SILVER, Roslyn, Pennsylvania
8 articles 0 photos 87 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You can't help others, if you yourself need help" -my sister ;) love it!

Aww, thanks. I was really nervous about posting this (along with everything else I post) because I just didn't think it was all that great. Thanks again! :)

on Dec. 24 2011 at 4:16 pm
clumsyteardropper SILVER, Roslyn, Pennsylvania
8 articles 0 photos 87 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You can't help others, if you yourself need help" -my sister ;) love it!

I know, right? I always found doing stuff like this fun and easy when I was younger... But I cannot seem to be able to do it anymore. :(

IzzyVT SILVER said...
on Dec. 24 2011 at 10:10 am
IzzyVT SILVER, N. Ferrisburg, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
“If the person you are talking to doesn't appear to be listening, be patient. It may simply be that he has a small piece of fluff in his ear.”
― A.A. Milne, Winnie-the-Pooh

I love the idea of the flame being a dancing lady...what a great piece!

on Dec. 7 2011 at 7:59 am
TubaLady DIAMOND, Athens, Michigan
89 articles 2 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I know how it feels to be completely alone and helpless, and the last thing you want to hear in that situation is, 'It's going to be OK. ' The only thing that seems to really help is that someone else who has felt that low expressing those feelings"

I love this, and I love writing poetry like this. Personification can be so much fun, and quite interesting to the common man.


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