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My Little Candle

There was a lady dancing in a bright dress with light blue lace.
She moved so softly when there’s a slight shift in the air.
This lady melted the ground beneath her, and yet she still stood.
Might I have let out a heavy sigh, she suddenly wouldn’t be there.

There was a lady dancing with the sweet smell of cool cucumber perfume.
The pool around her mirrored her every shining sway.
Light and warmth is a gift she had other than just dance.
But now she’s gone with a strange mist that follows her away
From the top of my little candle.



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eliana924 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 1, 2012 at 12:13 pm:
I think this is my favorite out of your pieces. I love the imagery and implicit meaning of the metaphor!
 
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IzzyVT said...
Dec. 24, 2011 at 10:10 am:
I love the idea of the flame being a dancing lady...what a great piece!
 
clumsyteardropper replied...
Dec. 24, 2011 at 4:18 pm :
Aww, thanks. I was really nervous about posting this (along with everything else I post) because I just didn't think it was all that great. Thanks again! :)
 
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TubaLadyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 7, 2011 at 7:59 am:
I love this, and I love writing poetry like this. Personification can be so much fun, and quite interesting to the common man.
 
clumsyteardropper replied...
Dec. 24, 2011 at 4:16 pm :
I know, right? I always found doing stuff like this fun and easy when I was younger... But I cannot seem to be able to do it anymore. :(
 
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