Nervous and In Love

sweat drips down my face
as I tell her about you
I'll know she'll understand
she's been in love before right?
so I tell her about you
she starts to cry but isn't
bittersweet she's not frustrated
she's not glum but what is she?
she's watching her little girl
become all grown up
I'm feel terrible when you come over but why?
I Love You
Don't I
but it's no big deal
soon I'll leave this house with you
spending ever second with you
I know I'll enjoy it
won't you?
Confused on what I should do
but why?
I'm Nervous but why?
I Love You Don't I?
she's hugging me with that death grip of hers as I think this threw
then I see our daughter me with her doing the same thing my mother is doing hugging me with joy
Our Daughter
that's when I know we'll love her as we Love each other





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zendaya said...
Oct. 31, 2012 at 10:41 am
thats just amazing i am speatchless i love it
 
AmieeLeeHope-Sierra replied...
Nov. 2, 2012 at 10:33 am
Thank you so much. It means a lot XD
 
thatunknownthing This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 2, 2012 at 1:04 pm
this is an entertaining piece, and you have conveyed a lot of emotions efficiently but not clearly and have you gone grammatically wrong i 'then i see our daughter.." that line isn't clear. but i think you would write spectacularly if you improvised on your errors a bit. good job.
 
GerryTheStone said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 1:22 pm
Love this! Amazing work you did!!
 
sunshine7223 said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 3:50 pm
I like this alot Jamie! Great job!!! :)
 
steph95 said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 2:01 pm
THIS IS REALLY GOOD , A LOT OF EMOTIONS :D
 
JamieNicole replied...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 3:33 pm
thanks I really appreciate that.
 
Falling.Up. said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 12:32 pm

this was great!! i love your work!

 

 
CarrieAnn13 said...
Nov. 27, 2011 at 4:45 pm
I think this is a great poem.  You just need to work on your punctuation and capitalization.  Maybe your rhythm could use a bit of tweaking (the fluctuating size of the lines is basically the problem).  But I love the idea behind this.  Well done! :)
 
KatrinaCampbell said...
Nov. 26, 2011 at 4:37 pm
That's really cute! You can definately see the gamut of emotions going on in the speaker's head!
 
crazycoolcritter said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 5:25 pm
love Love LOVE IT!!!!
 
AnimaCordis said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 4:39 pm
I love how this poem seems to follow the speaker's thoughts, you can hear how comfused and afraid they are. Yet at the same time you can feel how exited and happy they are as well. Good poem!
 
JamieNicole replied...
Nov. 26, 2011 at 3:33 pm
thank you so much
 
pinkowl said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 3:53 pm
awwww, so cute!!!
 
JamieNicole replied...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 4:07 pm

thanks

 

 
Illuminatus replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 6:54 am

really heart touching !!! nyc work , keep up the good work !!!!

 

 
JamieNicole replied...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 12:28 pm
Thanks! I really connected with this.
 
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