Nervous and In Love

November 11, 2011
By AmieeHope-Sierra GOLD, Royston, Georgia
AmieeHope-Sierra GOLD, Royston, Georgia
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments

Favorite Quote:
And There Will Come A Time, You'll See, With No More Tears. And Love Will Not Break Your Heart, But Dismiss Your Fears.


sweat drips down my face
as I tell her about you
I'll know she'll understand
she's been in love before right?
so I tell her about you
she starts to cry but isn't
bittersweet she's not frustrated
she's not glum but what is she?
she's watching her little girl
become all grown up
I'm feel terrible when you come over but why?
I Love You
Don't I
but it's no big deal
soon I'll leave this house with you
spending ever second with you
I know I'll enjoy it
won't you?
Confused on what I should do
but why?
I'm Nervous but why?
I Love You Don't I?
she's hugging me with that death grip of hers as I think this threw
then I see our daughter me with her doing the same thing my mother is doing hugging me with joy
Our Daughter
that's when I know we'll love her as we Love each other


The author's comments:
For my friend and her now ex but I guess that's bittersweet.

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on Nov. 2 2012 at 10:33 am
AmieeHope-Sierra GOLD, Royston, Georgia
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments

Favorite Quote:
And There Will Come A Time, You'll See, With No More Tears. And Love Will Not Break Your Heart, But Dismiss Your Fears.

Thank you so much. It means a lot XD

on Oct. 31 2012 at 10:41 am
KayliLovesYou PLATINUM, Lincoln, Nebraska
25 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont cry because it is over smile because it happened

thats just amazing i am speatchless i love it

on Oct. 2 2012 at 1:04 pm
thatunknownthing DIAMOND, Dubai, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift; that's why they call it the present"

this is an entertaining piece, and you have conveyed a lot of emotions efficiently but not clearly and have you gone grammatically wrong i 'then i see our daughter.." that line isn't clear. but i think you would write spectacularly if you improvised on your errors a bit. good job.

on Mar. 30 2012 at 1:22 pm
Love this! Amazing work you did!!

on Dec. 2 2011 at 3:50 pm
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

I like this alot Jamie! Great job!!! :)

on Dec. 2 2011 at 3:33 pm
AmieeHope-Sierra GOLD, Royston, Georgia
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments

Favorite Quote:
And There Will Come A Time, You'll See, With No More Tears. And Love Will Not Break Your Heart, But Dismiss Your Fears.

thanks I really appreciate that.

on Dec. 2 2011 at 2:01 pm
stephie95 PLATINUM, Tripoli, Other
25 articles 1 photo 65 comments
THIS IS REALLY GOOD , A LOT OF EMOTIONS :D

Sail_ BRONZE said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 12:32 pm
Sail_ BRONZE, Eugene, Oregon
3 articles 10 photos 196 comments

this was great!! i love your work!

 


on Nov. 28 2011 at 12:28 pm
AmieeHope-Sierra GOLD, Royston, Georgia
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments

Favorite Quote:
And There Will Come A Time, You'll See, With No More Tears. And Love Will Not Break Your Heart, But Dismiss Your Fears.

Thanks! I really connected with this.

Manish9 SILVER said...
on Nov. 28 2011 at 6:54 am
Manish9 SILVER, Kanpur, Other
6 articles 12 photos 110 comments

really heart touching !!! nyc work , keep up the good work !!!!

 


on Nov. 27 2011 at 4:45 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1648 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

I think this is a great poem.  You just need to work on your punctuation and capitalization.  Maybe your rhythm could use a bit of tweaking (the fluctuating size of the lines is basically the problem).  But I love the idea behind this.  Well done! :)

on Nov. 26 2011 at 4:37 pm
KatrinaCampbell GOLD, Aguadilla, Other
10 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
When God answers your prayers, you have faith in His abilities. When He doesn't, he has faith in YOUR abilities!

That's really cute! You can definately see the gamut of emotions going on in the speaker's head!

on Nov. 26 2011 at 3:33 pm
AmieeHope-Sierra GOLD, Royston, Georgia
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments

Favorite Quote:
And There Will Come A Time, You'll See, With No More Tears. And Love Will Not Break Your Heart, But Dismiss Your Fears.

thank you so much

on Nov. 25 2011 at 5:25 pm
collegegirladventures GOLD, Mequon, Wisconsin
10 articles 8 photos 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
A poet's work is to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to take sides, start arguments, shape the world, and stop it going to sleep.

~Salman Rushdie

love Love LOVE IT!!!!

on Nov. 25 2011 at 4:39 pm
AnimaCordis GOLD, London, Other
13 articles 0 photos 132 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Evil is when the good do nothing"

I love how this poem seems to follow the speaker's thoughts, you can hear how comfused and afraid they are. Yet at the same time you can feel how exited and happy they are as well. Good poem!

on Nov. 25 2011 at 4:07 pm
AmieeHope-Sierra GOLD, Royston, Georgia
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments

Favorite Quote:
And There Will Come A Time, You'll See, With No More Tears. And Love Will Not Break Your Heart, But Dismiss Your Fears.

thanks

 


pinkowl BRONZE said...
on Nov. 25 2011 at 3:53 pm
pinkowl BRONZE, Tyrone, Pennsylvania
3 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
Jeremiah 29:11

awwww, so cute!!!




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