Snow Angel

November 8, 2011
By eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
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Suspended in the air
limbs stretched out
body twisted in an X
pain etched in her face --- yet
she is beautiful.

Her pale milky skin is
lost in the blinding white snow.
Her long raven-black hair
snarls and tangles as she is
tossed through the sky.
She glows as the wind
whips her face
and her glazed-over eyes
look through me.

Body contorted in anguish,
arms and legs a mangled mess,
mute. Still,
I swear I can hear her
scream.


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eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 23 2011 at 1:34 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
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Oh okay haha thanks.. and thanks for giving me that suggestion anyway; I'll still think about it.

on Dec. 23 2011 at 1:27 pm
ArtemisVale GOLD, Paris, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth." - Oscar Wilde

It just meant that I had trouble finding a rhythm to it at first, but I have read over it since and I realize it doesn't really need one and I take back my first comment, now that I've read over it again it's really great!

eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 23 2011 at 12:01 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments
Hmm..what do you mean by flow? I wanted to just capture a single image, so I'm not intending for there to be time passing, which would need to flow to remain cohesive, so I'm not sure what you mean. Is the image I describe not cohesive?

on Dec. 23 2011 at 10:05 am
ArtemisVale GOLD, Paris, Other
11 articles 28 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth." - Oscar Wilde

I found the poem didn't have much of a flow to it, but the imagery is absolutly beautiful, so keep up the good work!


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