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Suspended in the air
limbs stretched out
body twisted in an X
pain etched in her face --- yet
she is beautiful.

Her pale milky skin is
lost in the blinding white snow.
Her long raven-black hair
snarls and tangles as she is
tossed through the sky.
She glows as the wind
whips her face
and her glazed-over eyes
look through me.

Body contorted in anguish,
arms and legs a mangled mess,
mute. Still,
I swear I can hear her
scream.



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ArtemisVale said...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 10:05 am:
I found the poem didn't have much of a flow to it, but the imagery is absolutly beautiful, so keep up the good work!
 
eliana924 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 12:01 pm :
Hmm..what do you mean by flow? I wanted to just capture a single image, so I'm not intending for there to be time passing, which would need to flow to remain cohesive, so I'm not sure what you mean. Is the image I describe not cohesive?
 
ArtemisVale replied...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 1:27 pm :
It just meant that I had trouble finding a rhythm to it at first, but I have read over it since and I realize it doesn't really need one and I take back my first comment, now that I've read over it again it's really great!
 
eliana924 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 1:34 pm :
Oh okay haha thanks.. and thanks for giving me that suggestion anyway; I'll still think about it.
 
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