I Would Dance

November 5, 2011
By Willow55 SILVER, Hudgins, Virginia
Willow55 SILVER, Hudgins, Virginia
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I didn't start out dancing
I started in the ruins,searching
nameless,hurting
But I knew
I would dance
It is what kept me going
I kept on keeping on
because I knew
I would dance
Even if it wasn't till the end
If it wasn't until heaven
no matter what
I would dance


The author's comments:
This is a poem I wrote to use for a monologue.

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on Oct. 6 2013 at 7:04 pm
Willow55 SILVER, Hudgins, Virginia
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Thanks @r_rachel98! And thanks for your opinion @A-Taller-Penumbra

on Oct. 6 2013 at 12:31 pm
Shade3043 DIAMOND, Shade3043 Did This, In Case Of Anonymous, Other
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Favorite Quote:
When I was a boy, I would always hear scary things in the news and my mother would say to me, "Always look for the helpers. Everywhere you look you will always find people helping." - Fred Rogers

Once again, not a bad poem, but the grammar and rhythm are off. I know that it's supposed to be put in a monologue, but it seemed pretty dull and unremarkable at times. It's an alright poem with decent imagery, but work on it, okay? :P  3/5

on Oct. 5 2013 at 10:08 am
IcingOnTheCupcake BRONZE, Altamont, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"You don't need anybody to tell you who you are or what you are. You are what you are!"~ John Lennon

I really liked this!

on Oct. 1 2012 at 4:16 pm
Willow55 SILVER, Hudgins, Virginia
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Thanks Skyler :) . It means alot

on Sep. 30 2012 at 5:23 pm
SkylerMorningstar GOLD, Barrie, Other
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awww i thought that was so sweet :)

on Sep. 26 2012 at 1:45 pm
Willow55 SILVER, Hudgins, Virginia
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My short story is now here! check it out and tell me what you think  

on Sep. 25 2012 at 6:09 pm
Willow55 SILVER, Hudgins, Virginia
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Thanks! I am hoping more of my work gets published soon!

Shannon311 said...
on Sep. 25 2012 at 5:39 pm
Shannon311, Virginia Beach, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
First they ignore you, then they laugh at you, then they fight you, then you win.
Mahatma Gandhi

I would love to see more of this! It was really good and it left me wanting to read more.

on Sep. 24 2012 at 5:16 pm
Willow55 SILVER, Hudgins, Virginia
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Thanks guys! I have the first chapter of a short story waiting to be approved, and some other stuff i'm thinking about submitting

Basilisk0wl said...
on Sep. 24 2012 at 12:19 pm
Basilisk0wl, Colchester, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Mad Hatter: "am i going mad?"
Alice: "Yes, you're mad, bonkers, off your head. But i'll tell you a secret... All the best people are."

This is really good :D I'd like to see more :P 

on Sep. 23 2012 at 4:18 pm
TimmyTiger GOLD, Somewhere, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"It's time to nut up, or shut up." - Woodey Harrelson "Zombieland"

Yeah a few grammar mistakes here and there, but other than that, really good! I wanna see more of your work :)

on Sep. 23 2012 at 2:18 pm
Willow55 SILVER, Hudgins, Virginia
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Thanks for the feedback. Since it is free verse, I focused on content but I see your point

on Sep. 23 2012 at 1:58 pm
Writer_In_The_Dark GOLD, Mount Vernon, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Happiness can be found in even the darkest of times, one needs only remember to turn on a light."
-Albus Percival Wulfrick Brian Dumbledore, in Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban

I like it, but I'm an absolute grammer Nazi, and there were a few grammer issues, mainly with commas and the spaces (non-existent spaces in this case) after them.

on Nov. 18 2011 at 12:31 pm
Willow55 SILVER, Hudgins, Virginia
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tell me what you think!


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